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Published: 2002-12-06 19:40:53 +0000 UTC; Views: 12733; Favourites: 119; Downloads: 3449
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EDIT: Until I can shrink the file size, I won't try reuploading to DA. However, this address works just as well:[link]
Right click, save as.
Ahhhh... what I've been working on for a month or more. This is the reason why I haven't been uploading anything of value lately. It took me way to long to make this. I still don't think it's up to par.
Things wrong with it:
1-Text is way too small. Sorry. I'm working on a actual typed font version, before I send it off to the Tokyopop contest.
2-It gets very Locke-esque toward the end.
3-Contrast changes on every page.
4-Proportions and sketching style change on every page. I'm not very good at proportions yet ;_;
5-The pages probably don't match up correctly, if printed in manga format (because of the double pages)
6-It's only in black and white - I will upload the colored pictures later. There's about 4 of them.
7-One of the frames is something I drew like a year ago.
8-A lot of the pages are just full-page pin-ups. I consider that a cop-out, because this is supposed to be a comic, not an illustrated novel (but it *will* be an illustrated novel eventually)
9-Lack of speech bubbles may make it hard to follow who is talking and when. I tried to make it obvious. Hopefully, IF you can read the text, you'll be able to understand what's going on.
The zipfile contains all 22 pages, and the cover. It's about 3mb. If you download it, please take the time to comment on it or give me feedback... I spent countless, countless hours on this and I consider it my magnum opus.. of the moment.
Mihi Angelam Mitte translates to "Send Me An Angel" in Latin.
If you try to rip any of the images or characters, I will hunt you down relentlessly ^_^ Not that they're very original to begin with... but humor me a little.
I've ranted too much. Just view teh stupdi manga.
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Comments: 134
Well you are on a great start! Havnt read the comic yet but will. Just reacding the description you sound like me but I plan on a movie not a magna ^_^;; Just with my art work now i have alot to learn but i am 14 and have alot of time to learn it! i feel like a bitch tellin you this! ^_^;;; but can you give me some good luck. havnt heard from you and havnt seen you even thank me but I just hope you can make this magna and hope that u can be sucessful! and i hope the same for me!
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Oh, wow. Excellent. I am astonished at how you conveyed the emotion in this manga! It's great! I don't know how to emphasis just how great this is. I love every bit of it. Your artistic ability is superb. The way you drew the angels in each frame (their wings, stances, etc) is wonderful! I stress, you MUST color page 20-21! Absolute MUST! ^.^
And the ending. I like it. The analogy was painful, but effective. It's funny though; being that they're angels, you'd assume they'd have more -magical- means of removing wings. Very good nonetheless. Keep writing!
+favs
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also, i dislike the screenshot of this VERY MUCH
make it like a small hint of the manga, or give it its own image
not this abstract baka ;(
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I love page 12-13!!
PLEASE COLOR THESE!
********NOTE TO N00BZ*********
you need Winzip to unzip these [or winrar ]
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Damn...I tried to download it, but it openned as a text file. Nuts!
Ah well. Here's major hoping that you win the tokyopop contest so I can see it! ^_^ And I'm sure it's glorious, since...y'know. That's what you do.
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i absoulotely love it! ^^, damn you did a great job!, i cant wait till its finished, the story is very intrigueing, probably one of the best intro's ive ever read! ^^ and to boot, some pretty damn great art to go along with it! personally i'd say that you're even better than some of the pro's!
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wow this is very interesting indeed. the flowing storline and the single-paneled art give it that slow, sublime movie feeling, almost like a dream. the page layouts are great and characters were original, individual, and stayed constant. Belive me and ignore what anyone says about the pictures, keep them the way they are,there is no need go and make your art boring now is there? this manga was an expirence
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aiee! I forgot to comment on this yesterday! o_-
Anyway, love it! The darker-shaded pages were very effective, and I personally thought the way you did the dialouge was fine. I never found myelf confused as to who was speaking, and the hand-drawn lettering really added to the overall feel of the comic. ^_^
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Wow, I think this is a very good first issue. I can't wait to read more. I'm totally drawn into this story now. you have made want to know what happens next! I love the cliffhanger ending.
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I really love your style and I love thatit's still sketchy, I espaecially love the drawing in the bath and the first one: beautyful!
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this looks really great :3 dloading the manga now .. cant wait to read
^^
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I really hope you read this since I'm about to give a long critique. Some of the points I might make you have already made yourself, but I just wanted to give my insight since I read a lot of comic books and mangas and am bored.
1: A lot of your pages lack even fluid strokes. The pencilling is often too light in many places. Though if you are going to retouch all of this up in Photoshop and color it, that doesn't really matter. But since I didn't know which 4 would be colored.
2: A lot of your pages have vast amounts of white area. You just usually don't see that when reading through comics.
3: Like you said, you really need to go forth with the typed font version and make the text boxes crisp and dark. Take a ruler tool to them for the straight edges and just generally clean them up.
4: Some of the frames don't seem parallel to the page and seem a bit crooked. Though this might of been your intent, it didn't seem like it was. But a few minutes in Photoshop could fix any of that.
5: The hammer on page 11 should be redrawn.
6: The full pages with the full black and white shading are what really stand out in your book. They are properly placed and I think are the focal point of your comic if one were to scan through them.
7: I would agree that your full page layouts are excessive. I would commit to just having those fully shaded pieces be the focal point of full page layouts while the rest stays in framed comic form. Even if its only a split two frame per page, it gives the sense of frames.
8: On page 9, I'm not sure how I feel about the blurred part of the picture. I see that a lot in comics now adays and it just seems out of placed. Always seems obviously touched up in a computer. Thats a personal preference though.
9: I love the paneling in page 19.
10: This kind of goes with the large amount of whiteness, but everything just seems so sparse. I know adding more frames into pages is kind of out of the picture, so I don't know what to say.
My final thoughts, this would sell on the shelves. Perhaps not as much as the top contenders with the full coloring and ink, but it would sell to its own unique crowd. It has the unique style and art to have a following. Just go back through, solidify your style and contrast levels. Clean it up and make it perfect. Avoid your own writing (its not smooth enough, no offense), and use typed words most of the time. In the one scene with the letter, I'd imagine a more delicate writing in it then the print writing.
I really hope you read this and if I merely repeated thoughts you already had and knew, I appologize.
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I liked the story. It is indeed very original in boththe art form and the story itself. Some of the lags in the words areas*( specifically where they were placed)8 at times did make it a bit confusing as to who was talking to who. The Page spreads didn't take away from the story however. The seemed to add more emotion to the moment, and some for the most part seemed very worked on detail wise. Certain area that weren't fully developed* drawing wise confused me a bit. The only thing that confuses me the most however is the end...i'm not sure if the angel getting the wings plucked was Haycon's Mom or Haycon herself. I think it was Haycon though, since her mom was last seen without her wings...but because of the flash back storyline, i wasn't sure.
But like i said before, it is indeed a very nice and original storyline. I look forward to learning more about Foku and Haycon's past, as well as seeing more misadventures of Doll lol. *^_^*
One final note...I particuarily like the page where Haycon's mom was removed from the room. Soo much emotion. I felt her pain. *^_^* Very nice. And the Vast Wing Spreads made it seem more sad when the were plucked away. Gave them more
Good luck on the contest! And i hope i didn't go overbaord with my review.
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OMG WOOOOOOOOOOOOWWWWWWWWWW This is Amazing! I love this! Its so pretty! Muy Muy bonito! Translated: Very Very Pretty...I hope. It should, if I've been paying enough attention in Spanish. Ahh I want to read your manga now...but I'd probably get in trouble for goofing off and not studying for my stupid exams. I LOVE YOUR ART!
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One word...SUPERB! Love the drawing style! But the font's kinda small tho but still better than the comic strips I make. Keep up the great work! GANBATTE BE! p(^-^)q
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awesome work matt, the sketchness is great, but some pages seen to be too light on pencil o_O
the foreshortening in her fall makes me drool, but i already drool for hal
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This is just AMAZING! Never before have I seen anything so cool! WOW!
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This is incredible, I feel like I should have paid to look at those. Your stuff is simply beautiful.
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well i have to say this is the best peices of work i have seen in a long time, you should set your sites high, you have the skills to get there, i could see you in the shelves at silversnails in a few hard working years, awsome stuff.... thanks for the experience.
- mik '02
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ahha, nice man! your a good drawer for hands and crap i like your work!
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ah it froze when i comment...u-u...i wish therew was a vote for "LOVE deviation" nnhh~ everything is beautiful, the layout, the proportions of the characters, the introduction writing~i love it, it's definately a story that should be published and be on teh shelves of comic stores worldwide~ X3 i'll buy them all ;-; wanting for more nya
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may i just say you are the fucking man....this is genious i love everything about it ...change what you may you are truly talented. ^_~
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My lord.
This has got to be the coolest thing I have seen yet on Devart. This is a prime example to all of the multitude of slackers in the world what a long and determined effort will produce. You have an excelent and unuique sense of comic design which I must appluad. I think that this is a wonderful start to what could turn out to be a very original and awesome comic (or graphic novel) series. I've found my way to your section several times now and am amazed that you are not on my devwatch... You are most certainly going on there now! I cannot commend you enough for this work, and eaglerly await any new developments from you. Keep it up!
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Good god, Fallout. The way your draw wings is just breathtaking. o_o I really like the little taste of the storyline that you've given. I'd definately pick this up if it ever got published. Or, of you ever self-published it. And, for some reason, I love the sketchyness of it all. It's so simple and clean. It looks like it should be lacking something, but, to me, everything's there. Beautiful. +fav
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I have to say... your doujinshi was amazing; the drawing great and the shading on some of the single-image pages such as page 16 was just superbly outstanding. Please make the secound issue: you left me in suspense!
+Fav and +DeviWatch. w00t, Nice job man.
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I like this a lot. Your technical skills, obviously, I don't need to even bother with - they're great. You have an excellent style to it; the softness is a beautiful touch when combined with the anger and blood and love in this piece. You're going on my watch; I'd love to see more of this. If I wasn't in the midst of an only slightly-lucid state of consciousness, I could probably offer some nice insight as to what might be improved, etc. But, not right now. Sorry ^^() maybe later Beautiful manga.
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I am a fan of comics. This oneis very good and I think you have good change on the contest ^^_^
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woah....incredible. i enjoyed it very much.
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actually kind of inspired to draw right now
good work
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I really love your style. The story also has me very interested in what happens next. Keep up the wonderful work!!
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that was totaly sweet, what happens next though? please draw more, sooooooon, i need more.
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Could someone please tell me what program I need to view the d/l in? It just showed up a bunch of written garble when I d/l it just now. HELP, I really wanna see it!
Sounds interesting!
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Eeee!!! you finally finished! i wanna see! i wanna see!
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tizzite omg. hehe.. it's really nice. i love how fo wears a bandage instead of sunglasses.. and halycon is so sweet~
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Damn. That's fuckin badass. I love your drawing style. Hopefully another one will be coming soon?
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This.. is ... incredible!!!
I'm not good with words so incredible and wow are the only things coming out of my mouth at the moment.. but really.. this is just.. wow..
I'm in awe and will now worship you X3
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Yo Foku regardless what anyone thinks even YOU this is prime work. I am just kidding...about the caring part...but it is fucking blowing my mind.
As far as story it captivated me. I was feeling Hal's pain as she stood against those she thought betrayed her mother. And when her wings were shredded..yeah nice cliffhanger!
Foku's attention to Hal was also very touching in a world of comics where even the good guy is kinda dead inside and border line evil. Splitting the intro into two parts is definitely a good move. Two points of views one introducing Foku and his desolate life, the other what led Hal from Heaven to Earth( I think).
As far as the art my man everything rocked. I don't agree with you on the point of anatomy. I think you got a great grasp of it. Also leaving most of the pages just hand made was good only using computer work to enhance a part of the story that was IMHO very important.
I would love to see this play out and whoever mentioned that you should take it to Antartic Press or Radio Comix was right.
Or since you are in Orlando you can come down to Tampa and hook up with CrossGen comics they are based out of St. Petersburg.
Just my thoughts
Sk3ch
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Very impressive... I love it. I don't really think it's very cliche. There may have been similar stories in the past, but how can anyone say it's been overplayed after only the first chapter?
Your style and composition of the pages really brings out the emotions in the pages. I think it's very well done. Can't wait until the next chapter :]
My only recommendation is that you make the pages a little smaller.. but then you'd probably lose a lot of the wonderful detail.. very difficult. Oh well, I don't really mind that much. I still love it!
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