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Published: 2011-01-04 19:49:40 +0000 UTC; Views: 2078; Favourites: 18; Downloads: 8
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Description I am nothing
From my throat
Comes the ravens cry
From the soft noise of my robes
Comes the last breath of life
From the chill of my bones
Comes the chill of death
From the shadow the night is born
Where I walk
Death follows
Ever approaching
Yet never reaching
Until the white knight
Rides the horizons
I am worshiped
I am cursed
Ever shall I pace
The earth so wide
Seeing all
Yet never being seen
The fear I see
When I look in your eyes
The fear I leave
In the back of your mind
Makes you believe…
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Comments: 35

Yinxabell [2016-01-15 13:46:24 +0000 UTC]

This poem is just hitting right into my heart...
Great work!

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John--Vincent [2011-08-29 15:04:48 +0000 UTC]

I like the "seeing all, yet never being seen" part.

Nice poem.

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FarmerCotten In reply to John--Vincent [2011-08-30 16:24:36 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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John--Vincent In reply to FarmerCotten [2011-08-30 17:01:54 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.

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Knightress221 [2011-08-29 06:07:44 +0000 UTC]

Everyone seems to be better then me when it comes to lyrics >_> lol nvm, you're amazing at this.

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FarmerCotten In reply to Knightress221 [2011-09-01 03:49:17 +0000 UTC]

Also thanks for the fav! Sorry for the mega delay

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FarmerCotten In reply to Knightress221 [2011-08-30 16:27:26 +0000 UTC]

Nah, I just throw words on paper how they flow out of my head. It's just getting your mind to make them flow out, start like I did and just writing little bits and pieces everywhere when you are bored in class or something and listen to a lot of music but really listen to the lyrics, it helps a lot. Thank you for the encouragement!

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insomatic-studios [2011-06-02 22:27:57 +0000 UTC]

very nice work...i like the last 6 lines. would you mind reading this and maybe helping me out with it? :[link]

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FarmerCotten In reply to insomatic-studios [2011-06-23 21:36:44 +0000 UTC]

Sure, sorry for the delay I just got my new computer today and haven't had one to use until today.

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NeverFallAsleep [2011-05-20 22:23:31 +0000 UTC]

Very eerie and enchanting, just a hint; maybe you could vary the punctuation a little bit? I got told to do that and it really helped with my writing

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Underthabridge [2011-05-13 19:52:44 +0000 UTC]

I thought it flowed really well, the descriptions were also quite nice

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FarmerCotten In reply to Underthabridge [2011-05-16 15:16:00 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! Did any lines stand out?

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Underthabridge In reply to FarmerCotten [2011-05-16 15:26:07 +0000 UTC]

Yes, for example "From the shadow the night is born," or "Comes the last breath of life." Its hard ti explain they are just god examples of well flowing sentences.

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FarmerCotten In reply to Underthabridge [2011-05-16 15:32:50 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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Underthabridge [2011-05-13 19:52:42 +0000 UTC]

I thought it flowed really well, the descriptions were also quite nice

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Painelover [2011-05-13 16:56:13 +0000 UTC]

I like the symbolism, and its erie feel. The mood is great. Its a good job

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FarmerCotten In reply to Painelover [2011-05-13 19:45:27 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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selhiamafuchi [2011-05-12 01:37:02 +0000 UTC]

'Ever approaching, never reaching.' 'I am worshipped, I am cursed.'

Woah. You're writing is very powerful. Keep it up.

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FarmerCotten In reply to selhiamafuchi [2011-05-13 14:20:50 +0000 UTC]

haha, someone caught on to my endless rant of questions I ask people.

Thank you! Hopefully something new will come out today now that my classes are over.

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TyBigonet [2011-05-12 00:31:52 +0000 UTC]

I believe there's a type "every approaching"

I really love it! It's excellently written and very sweet.

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FarmerCotten In reply to TyBigonet [2011-05-13 14:19:33 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for pointing that out, got it all fixed now

Thank you! Did any lines stand out to you?

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Orion-the-Absol [2011-04-08 23:21:10 +0000 UTC]

Hmm hmm, pretty nice. It flows so well.

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FarmerCotten In reply to Orion-the-Absol [2011-04-11 14:02:19 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

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Fictional-Fact [2011-04-07 04:31:39 +0000 UTC]

I like this, especially the end. Everything from "Seeing all" to the last line is just striking. I mean, personally, I feel the rest of it is too dramatic, at least without context. However, by the time I finished, it was dramatic, but good.

I know these are old, but there are a few things you could do to clean this up. For example, I know poetry doesn't need to conform to grammar, but with the ellipses at the end, the rest seems naked. If you like, I can rewrite it with the punctuation, or you can, but give it some thought.

Secondly, "ravens cry" ought to be "raven's cry" or "ravens' cry". Nevertheless, good work!

Oh, btw, you are not nothing. Not sure if this is a poem about yourself, but just needed to remind you you're worth it.

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FarmerCotten In reply to Fictional-Fact [2011-04-11 14:08:52 +0000 UTC]

First sorry about the mega delay on the reply, I had too many tabs open last week apparently and lost this one, sorry!

Thank you muchly, I'm glad that it was worth the read for you.

It would be interesting to see how you would rewrite it and edit so I can get your thoughts and ideas on things.

Sorry I shoulda caught that, I'll fix that one here today at some point here soon.

This one was written a while ago, I don't remember exactly when. My memory is kinda shot at times due to the fact that I hide a lot from myself to keep myself sane. Though this one was from a worse part in my life, I've come a long way since then. Still twisted and having bad days, but I am a lot better.

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XxAmyRainbowxX [2011-04-04 16:40:13 +0000 UTC]

Amazing.....

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FarmerCotten In reply to XxAmyRainbowxX [2011-04-04 17:29:40 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, can I ask what you liked about it?

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XxAmyRainbowxX In reply to FarmerCotten [2011-04-04 18:41:13 +0000 UTC]

It's just so emotive and really well written, I can't really describe why but I love it!

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FarmerCotten In reply to XxAmyRainbowxX [2011-04-05 13:21:06 +0000 UTC]

Cool thank you! Did any lines stand out to you?

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XxAmyRainbowxX In reply to FarmerCotten [2011-04-05 17:10:20 +0000 UTC]

Hmm... Probably:
"From my throat
Comes the ravens cry"
And,
"Ever shall I pace
The earth so wide"
But I loved it all.

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FarmerCotten In reply to XxAmyRainbowxX [2011-04-05 18:30:46 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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XxAmyRainbowxX In reply to FarmerCotten [2011-04-05 19:02:28 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome.

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FarmerCotten In reply to XxAmyRainbowxX [2011-04-06 14:32:37 +0000 UTC]

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kaltblut [2011-03-16 21:25:53 +0000 UTC]

I like it so very much!!!! you keep writing... you're very talented!!!

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FarmerCotten In reply to kaltblut [2011-03-17 17:14:41 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! Did any lines stand out to you?

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