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Published: 2010-10-26 04:33:14 +0000 UTC; Views: 139; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 0
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Scarred fists beat a black sun.Wings reflect eyes, claws bear fists.
Wrinkled clouds break together.
This man to bear witness.
I am Forge, and this is my song.
Savage howls of uneasy hearts break spirits fallen slumber.
Polar monuments, darkened pinnacles of hollow air.
Shattered dreams hang from lips, poisoned.
Silver rain curses his hair.
Fallen we have been.
Shunned and beaten.
Contained behind chained braces.
Now we roam your Earth.
Now we roam your homes.
With crooked heads and ashen eyes.
We bear your fate.
I am Forge, and this is my song.
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Now.
Bloat yourself with arrogance.
Leech your mother of her soul.
Emasculate those who try to help.
Eventually you will realize...
Death is our name.
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Comments: 25
Intense. I was caught up in the forge and it beat me into submission - and I didn't want it to end.
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XD Sounds like a great time, ahahh!
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Whew! You should read T.S. Eliot's "The Hollow Men". Your poem has this kind of ominous feel. Your personification of the forge works in a Tolkeinesque way. I like the weight of it!
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Thanks for the comment, and I really enjoyed the conversation we had during the writer's group meeting. Like I said, most of the time I'll write something without meaning then find out that it could mean something later, or I'd just change the meaning of something I'd written to mean something else. The conversation we had gave it a great meaning, and I'm proud of that.
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As all of your poems, I REALLY LIKE THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
'try so hard to live, but yet there is no way, they all must die.'
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That's awesome. Did you write that?
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Well, I just thought of it when I commented on your poem!
I'm kind of proud of myself for doing that!
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You should submit that.
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nice! as always. i guess i should get writing mi piece, eh? heh
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Thankiez.
Well, it's only due for Monday. 
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eehee! free candy day! luv it!
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GrrrrhhhyyyyaaaayyyyY!!!! Tomorrow! XD So how is this all gonna work?
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well, we need a meeting place. and i wuz thinkin maybe we'd go from 8-10ish. dat alright?
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Yerp. Maybe we could hang out a while before, too. I have no plans.
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This is awesome! I love all the little details that you added, it gave extra visual in my mind, and it was creepy, haha.
Great job!
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Thank you. Personally, I was most proud of the part, "With crooked heads and ashen eyes."
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That part was awesome
It's always good when the writer themselves have a favourite part
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I thought it was some form of conceit. O.o huh... ^^
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I don' know, I think it's good if the writer like's their own piece, as long as they're not flaunting it and are like "this is the best ever!" then I think it's okay, haha.
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