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Published: 2011-05-10 05:46:12 +0000 UTC; Views: 257; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 2
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The room is white.Lights lining the walls shine brightly, but staring doesn't hurt.
Laying peacefully, outstretched on the floor, my music plays loudly.
The spotlight shines on me, but I'm alone.
There are no shadows, but they thrive in my mind.
The room is black.
Laying on my back, I sit up, lowering my head to cradle it between my knees.
I turn my music off, but I can still hear a voice.
The darkness of my mind has become this room.
I delve into the night and dream about the light.
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i love the last line of the first.. uhhh.. stanza?? damn its been awhile since iv read poetry??!?! anyhoo. "There are no shadows, but they thrive in my mind." ... that line just gets me...
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Hahah, thanks for the feedback. It seems people really go for that sort of thing, what's the word..... oxymoron. I'll have to try and use more of those sometime. And, yeah, they're called stanzas in poetry.
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haha right.... yeah people (me included!!!) really likeit
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Mind if I show this to my English teachers? I believe they would LOVE your work.
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last line; "I delve into the night and dream about the light." fantastic.
I always tell people to have strong endings, and you definately pulled it off, wonderful!
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