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Published: 2004-09-23 02:51:07 +0000 UTC; Views: 3238; Favourites: 72; Downloads: 391
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Yea, so, I'm in this school function called, "Lantern" were students write poetry and share it and what not... Blatantly, at the first meeting, the teacher in charge comments on how almost all of the poems are teenage angst poems. Well, no suprise there, but it irked me a tad. Reading through the collection of poems from last year, it certainly seems the club is inundated with angst-riden poems. Well, if I were to add anything to the club, it would most certianly have been agnsty... so instead, I decided to do a light hearted, cutsie, foo-foo poem... with a Bradford twist. Yea, so it's done, just finished it now, doodled it up in AP US History. Hope you like it... and I hope it fits in with all the other poems... haha, sarcasm, how I love thee."Today I took a staple gun
And placed it upon my lip
Eyelids clenched, block the sun
Smiled, "Let 'er rip"
A heavy pull, a sharp yelp,
Some temporary pain
And suddenly, alright I felt
Enough for it, again.
Today I took a staple gun
And placed it upon my lip
A skillful hand, much fun
But suddenly, I slipped
Staples, staples in my cheek
I had not meant to maul
O dear how today's plans look bleak,
As I'm stapled to the wall."
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Hehe, that's how most of my poems begin - but I don't have a car yet, so *shrug*
Glad I held your interest ^_-, and I'm really glad you enjoyed it.
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lol! Nice one!! I too write angsty poems. Actually, sometimes I get the feeling that's the only kind I'm able to write...except of course the little one about llamas, but it's probably better to forget that
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Lovely, lazy, lounge llamas!!!
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Freakin' Awsome. Love the poem.. *_* 
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Great great, I'm sure who ever the hell is running Lantern this year is gonna love that. 
hahah ap us I... hahahahahaha, the teacher is a sexist sodomizing bastard who should take his conservative values and shove them up his ass.... and then he should be fornicated with a stick. bastard. (i got the A for the year, so it has nothing to do with revenge)
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See - I usually don't involve the words "poet" and "conservative" into the same catagorey, but I guess this man is one of the exceptions. Did he do anything personal to you? Discrimination... anything?
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well.... he is just really really sexist and conservative in his views... which basically influences his GRADING PROCESS...
We did this gay project... Civil war powerpoint....Arielle anD I worked our butts off and got an 85!!! (he counted as like.. 23948203984 test grades, and gave me a B!) and some other group's was shit, and he liked the kid, gave them a 95....
oh and by the way... he cant count for SHIT. if you ask him to calculate your grade... its the funniest thing... last year hed be like... "well, lesee, you have.... a 92, 95, 91, 87, 100, 99, then u take into accounr the 1.28 PHI ration fo the world relationship and multiply that by the circumfrence of the earth and then you definitly have to add the avarage rainfall of the amazon basin for hte month of JULY and then... I dunno Julia.. that looks like a C to me..."
Ju:
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Ohmygod, hahahahaha that's classic.
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See? Look above! Someone actually "read the whole thing". The WHOLE THING! It's en vogue to look at the art, read half a stanza, and comment on how it's pritty, I think. Anyway.
Fun stuff. I like the sarcastic, auto-morbid feeling you ran with. Hell, for something you just whipped up for giggles, it's actually pretty decent. You've got structure, you've got disobedience, you've got a little humor, and a bit of moral. To be the tangent-loving little fucker that I am, I'd like to say that I think more than an expression of a given subject, an emotion, a situation or anything, any poem is first and foremost an expression of someone's identity. Simply by the way it's written, how the writer chooses to examplify certain things, what metaphors or similes or devices they use, etc, it gives away a lot about that person in turn. I think you achieved that. from what I can tell, you're a calculative, darkly sarcastic observer, and this work shows that.
We can argue about what constitutes a good or bad attribute (if we wanted to be all Christian and judgemental about it), but I think it's all pretty damn good if you put it to task like you did here.
Cool and kind of surprising, enjoyable stuff, Bradford.
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Aw, thank you so much, Alistair. This comment means a lot to me, really. US AP History boredom inspires some decent stuff, ^.....^
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i want to be stapled to the wall... o.O it sounds like a fun time...
nice job. : )
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*whips out a staple gun and begins persuing you*
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hahaha that could be taken so many ways...
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I didn't even realize this... I guess my perverted-sensing skillz are all out of whack... oi, I need some medication.
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haha well, it's okay. thats what im here for! *gives you some meds so you can sense the sickness*
heh
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MY GOD...... 
This is soo frikkin cool!!!
Okay, where didja get the font for the poem first of all?
its a really cool font, and the splatter around the borders is a great touch, didja do that with a toothbrush?
the whole subject matter of the poem i think is nice too, really sorta dark but sorta care-free and cute.
(yes i called your dark poem CUTE!)
And yes, i have to say that usually i HATE all forms of poetry, simply because the ONLY people who understand it, are the people writing the poems, about nature or the 5000th poem of how their life sucks more than anyone else's.
but just cause of your layout and the way you incorporated the illustration in the image, i ACTUALLY read the whole thing!
Great job!
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Haha, thank you soooo much! Well - the poem was supposed to be a bit humourous, so, I'm glad you liked it. The font is from [link] , if you want it.
And yea, usually I'm the only one understanding my poetry/writing, but that's okay... I'd rather it be opaque than transparent.
The splatter was from India Ink and, yes, a toothbrush. I scanned it at a high resolution and then took a small section of it, coloured it in, blurred it, etc. and then, yea... photoshopped it a lot, the wole deal.
Thanks again.
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um quite funni in some odd sick twisted way but i enjoyed reading it.
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Odd, sick, and twisted is my middle name! Actually, I lied, it's not... but still, I'm glad you enjoyed reading it.
Thank you for the comment, you have signled that I can go to bed now, this day is complete.
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