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FlawedNoOne β I Had a Title... I Forgot It.
Published: 2004-09-23 02:51:07 +0000 UTC; Views: 3238; Favourites: 72; Downloads: 391
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Yea, so, I'm in this school function called, "Lantern" were students write poetry and share it and what not... Blatantly, at the first meeting, the teacher in charge comments on how almost all of the poems are teenage angst poems. Well, no suprise there, but it irked me a tad. Reading through the collection of poems from last year, it certainly seems the club is inundated with angst-riden poems. Well, if I were to add anything to the club, it would most certianly have been agnsty... so instead, I decided to do a light hearted, cutsie, foo-foo poem... with a Bradford twist. Yea, so it's done, just finished it now, doodled it up in AP US History. Hope you like it... and I hope it fits in with all the other poems... haha, sarcasm, how I love thee."Today I took a staple gun
And placed it upon my lip
Eyelids clenched, block the sun
Smiled, "Let 'er rip"
A heavy pull, a sharp yelp,
Some temporary pain
And suddenly, alright I felt
Enough for it, again.
Today I took a staple gun
And placed it upon my lip
A skillful hand, much fun
But suddenly, I slipped
Staples, staples in my cheek
I had not meant to maul
O dear how today's plans look bleak,
As I'm stapled to the wall."
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Comments: 73
But, did you really forget your title??
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This is awesome ^^
Like ur style and this kind of humour <3
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weird, freaky and creepy but i like it somewat.
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Upon all the other amazing comments you have, I'm going to go ahead and add a small one to this collection.
First off, you are one of the /very/ few I know that can actually make a poem "Foo-Foo" ish-ness.
And second, the whole overall thing was cute and lovely. A favorite.
Good work. ^^
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Looooooooooove it ^_^ especcially the last few lines.
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I like it. How do ya make those borders? I wanna make something similar...I always see people with such cool borders. -KG
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I really like this. It's funny, well... yeah sick and funny... but it's pretty awesome. Nice picture to go with it too!
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Glad to see someone has a sense of humour on this site - thank you very much.
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The sick humor and the creepiness of it all, I love it! >w< +fav
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Haha, why thank you. <3
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if you've never read this book, i suggest we go to borders one day and find it. i've been meaning to buy it anyway. (my parents decided against getting it for me years and years ago. i don't know why they thought i wouldn't like it.)
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It's authored and illustrated by the same cartoonist who created the older animated Adult Swim show, 'The Oblongs'. And hell, it looks pretty damn funny.
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fun fun!
nice poem! and the picture fits so nicely!
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Well, you know me, such a fun guy!
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I know those are lyrics of a song... but which song? "We were ever so, ever so!".
Probably something terrible.
I'll reply if I ever figure this out.
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At least you see the humour in it...
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this is awesome.
i really hope you like jhonen vasquez and/or edward gorey.
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I used to worship Jhonen Vasquez, for... oh, six years or so - I felt it was time to move on, you know? Oh, and I do <3 Edward Gorey, along with a slew of other artists.
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everyone should love edward gorey, but not enough do.
anyway, you art is awesome, i really like it a lot. good work.
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Thank you very much, that means a lot to me.
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Your stuff is amazing. You probably get that a lot. If you do you deserve it. If not, well, people are idiots.
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You're too kind - I can only hope to improve.
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Isn't it all any of us can hope for? You don't have so far to go as some.
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hahaha wierd but cute
oh i feel bad now ... im laughing at a girl stapled to the wall o.O oops
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I joke around with everything, I'm glad you laughed, as it was the reaction I wanted.
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i really like this one its very nicely done and i love the poem..
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Ha, I'm glad you do, thank you so much for the favourite.
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Any time you did a wonderful job..
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Hehe, nice angst club you got there. I like your poem, it's funny and freaky at the same time...
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The near-entirety of the poems is nothing more then horrid clichΓ©s strung together in a pseudo-lyrical format. The constant mention of the tearing out of hearts is beginning to make me rue my very participation in the club. On the contrary, I do get to candidly insult every piece of crap pushed through the club... so, it evens out. However, do not misconstrue, the occasional submission has talent and is enjoyable to read.
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I know. It takes talents to just avoid clichΓ©s, let alone playing with them and transforming them into something new, something original. You did a good job on this piece. My guess is that most of the poems in your club still uses simplistic language. If I am to be proven wrong about your club, then you are very lucky to have the talented around and the talent to understand talent itself.
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For an angst-ridden teen you seem to have a great sense of humor! Then again so does Jhonen Vasquez!
Keep on writing an' jus' plain expressin' yourself!
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Haha, I'm so friekin' whiney, but I have a feel bursts of humour here and there. Yea, Jhonen Vasquez was one the people who taught me that poking fun at yourself can be funny.
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you're my favorite person! holy crap you rock my pinkerton acadamy "red and white day" school pride socks! that made no sense but it's red and white day and i'm wearing red socks and i'm white so yay for school spirit! anyway i love you! you're amazing and that's a kick ass poem! the picture just makes it a billion times better. it's an oddly amuzing piece! holy fricken crap, I LOVE YOu! 
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I'm terriefied right now.
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*huggles* 
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*throws up his arms and shrieks, quickly bolting to the nearest exit*
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*jumps over boy's head and lands in door way* don't run away! *taps fingers in a very "mr. burns" kind of way* mwahahahahaha
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This is awesome. It made me actually smile today... thank you!
Don't know what to say, I love the last line and how it kinda throws it back at you. Like.. no this isn't an angsty teen poem. Go away.
I want to paint it on my wall.
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Hehe, <333, I'll help you paint it ^_-
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haha that was great!
this is one of the few poems that have kept my attention long enugh to read it all
most start.."woe is my ..how awfull life is to me ..my car broke down..." there after looseing my attention
but that one was a great poem..and was fun to read..
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