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Published: 2005-08-27 09:59:45 +0000 UTC; Views: 257; Favourites: 6; Downloads: 12
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I want to writeI want to fight
I want to make it all right
and tell her that I want her as a friend
But she’s locked within herself
and she doesn’t want me to reach her
I want to live
I want to give
someone a reason to laugh
But I’m just a problem
to myself and everyone else
And I wish I knew what to do
but my words lost their meaning
as soon as I chose to speak them
I don’t want to feel this pain
I don’t want it to be all in vain
(I want it to rain)
But everything is too much to ask for
cause I’ve forfeit my chances
and I wont get ‘em back
I don’t want to cry
I don’t want to live in a lie
I’d want to try
how it would be to be constantly happy
And never need to worry that I might
just fuck something up
Comments: 9
since this was most popular i guess i'll comment on this then, i really have no idea how to advise or really crrretique this sort of stuff, i actually hate reading poems an dpoetry too lol, but lets see um, i liek the flow of it, it feels like a song, especially the parts with the "i" and the i's are also a pattern that i forgot what it was called lol, i guess this is nice if there are peoepl who faved it
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i like your writing in this poem!!!! it was a great poem!!!
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Very, very nice poem. I feel like that a lot of the time.. Actually every day. A very nice one.
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This poem is about feeling useless, am I correct? It really gave me that feeling, and I love how you put that into words.
Great job!
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yeah you could say that. felt that I couldn't do anything about a situation and came upwith this. thanks for fav!
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