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Fooled — Token
Published: 2005-12-02 23:16:20 +0000 UTC; Views: 138; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 4
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Description
Faint I hear her stumblingUpon a floor of stone
Faint I hear it crumbling
And a silent moan
She fell and she wont rise
More than bones are broken
She fell, burdened under constant lies
Take this as a token
Comments: 5
Great job. its short yet to the point and the use of ryming words makes it fun although the imagry it invokes is sad and dangerous.
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Hmm, I really like the vocabulary you used. Excellent use of imagery as well. Very nice.
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