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Published: 2005-10-31 23:02:24 +0000 UTC; Views: 412; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 19
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Mysterious tones dancing in the nightTelling their story of joy and light
I hope you can hear them
I hope you do
And I hope you know that the one playing
Is playing for you
But bitterness is the memory you can’t replace
It captured you and it has put it’s mark on your face
I would rescue you
If I only could
Remember that my dear
Rescue you I would
But if this is to be an end of things
Just listen to night and how it sings
Remember a time
And describe it to me
Paint with your words
And make me see
Comments: 23
god, you're just so good.
last stanza = goosebumps.
you've got skills, dude.
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well you're experiencing my so called glory-days ^^
but thanks, I need this
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The rhyme flows well, I especially liked the last stanza, very powerful. A short but sweet poem, me thinks.
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glad you found it to your liking, and thanks for your favs on this and The Monster That Is Me.
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this is really good!
i wasn't 100% sure what was going on, but i have the jist of it
the music of the night [suddenly the phantom of the opera soundtrack comes to mind...lol]
i like the imagry it provides! : ) nice job!
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"Paint with your words/And make me see" Awesome line!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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i really like the flow to this. keep up the good work
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I think the last stanzas make it. It comes together nice and flows well. It's nicely written. Simple, but sweet. Nice job.
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the last stanza was very powerful, a very well executed ending!
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