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Description I am the master of incompletion!
Or rather, am complete,
but drawn to incompletion as the opposite end of a magnet.
My glory is in that which has no future:
should anything come to an end, and a good one,
it is nothing of mine;

For I am two-thirds a fairytale ending,
“ever after”  without “happily.”
(That is not to say tragically! Both imply a conclusion.
A better adverb is “indefinitely.”
Indefinitely ever after.)
I am living that work which is never quite done,
left on a shelf to be perfected "whenever."
I am that unskilled playwright,
at the end of whose play a hundred plot-strings are left untied.

Nothing is more inevitable or as mind-bendingly impossible to find as the future.
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Comments: 9

hewsan [2009-09-23 00:55:40 +0000 UTC]

leaves a chance for a "better" sequel...

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anelle [2009-07-30 17:22:04 +0000 UTC]

Lovely!
As someone else mentioned, I really enjoyed this part:

For I am two-thirds a fairytale ending,
“ever after” without “happily.”
(That is not to say tragically! Both imply a conclusion.
A better adverb is “indefinitely.”
Indefinitely ever after.)

Also:

"but drawn to incompletion as the opposite end of a magnet."

Beautiful work!

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Formlessforce In reply to anelle [2009-07-30 17:38:08 +0000 UTC]

Thank you Those are some of the lines I'm proudest of.

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SavingCleo [2009-07-30 04:19:00 +0000 UTC]

For I am two-thirds a fairytale ending,
“ever after” without “happily.”

^^ that is my favorite line


I really like this.

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Formlessforce In reply to SavingCleo [2009-07-30 04:21:38 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for the comment! I love it when people tell me WHAT they like about something I've written, it lets me know it's not just a generic "I just sorta skimmed, but I guess it's cool. CHECK OUT MY STUFF NOW PLZ" comment xD

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SavingCleo In reply to Formlessforce [2009-07-30 04:30:32 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.

Ha, I know what you mean.
Personally, I could care less if people check my stuff out or not. My DA account is for me to check other people's stuff out and occasionally post a random piece of my own work.

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IIIXII [2009-07-29 21:56:12 +0000 UTC]

That last line is phenomenal.




This is mind blowing-ly well written.

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Formlessforce In reply to IIIXII [2009-07-29 21:57:50 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, thank you!

I have many more poems waiting in the hopper, so to speak. I don't want to get too crazy posting them until I actually get some readers, so I'm limiting myself to one a day.

I have one called "The Formless Force"

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IIIXII In reply to Formlessforce [2009-07-29 22:13:32 +0000 UTC]

Oooh, I should make a poem after my namesake. ^^

And yeah, that's what I do. Can't wait to read them though.

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