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Published: 2011-01-16 20:40:17 +0000 UTC; Views: 288; Favourites: 6; Downloads: 6
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Here i lie in a pool of patience,listening carefully to the leaves
as they taunt the winds with dry anticipation.
No rain has fallen for centuries,
and i find myself dehydrated.
Here i lie, tangled in weeds of weakness,
waiting once more for the sky to come
and pierce the canopy above.
No voices have spoken to me,
and i find myself abandoned.
Here i lie in a bed of beliefs,
false with the hope for recognition,
while the darkness approaches
the clearing's lips.
No stars have shone here,
and i find myself betrayed.
Here i stay in a wreath of wreckage,
kept by an obligation
of constant waiting,
though truth claims they will not return.
I will stay here forever,
and find myself patient.
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Comments: 13
spoems [2011-03-31 02:51:30 +0000 UTC]
" Here i lie in a bed of beliefs"
I like that notion, and how beliefs almost sounds like leaves in this context.
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ForYourself In reply to spoems [2011-04-01 02:43:55 +0000 UTC]
thank you for readingXD your comment is much appreciated
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AngeliqueRaindrops [2011-03-14 11:00:58 +0000 UTC]
I really like the way that it's written, bring the real world in, such as "weeds of weakness" and "bed of beliefs", yet intertwine them with your own thoughts. Nicely written!
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ForYourself In reply to AngeliqueRaindrops [2011-03-14 20:46:08 +0000 UTC]
Thank You. I'm glad you enjoyed
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Iniquitire [2011-01-27 23:27:19 +0000 UTC]
i miss you and your writing, bro D:
lovely as usual
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EmoRamenLover [2011-01-17 02:34:42 +0000 UTC]
Wow man this one really speaks to me, can't really say just how but it is one of your best. Great work <3
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EmoRamenLover In reply to ForYourself [2011-02-08 22:50:56 +0000 UTC]
You're very welcome :3
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ChelOpera [2011-01-16 21:11:01 +0000 UTC]
I really like the way you used your vocabulary, it really works to your advantage here and makes this piece very beautiful.
Nice work!
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ForYourself In reply to ChelOpera [2011-01-17 16:40:58 +0000 UTC]
Thank youXD im glad u enjoyed it
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