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Yup! It's finally here!
Page 1 of Forgotten's chapter 2. This is actually the first time I've gotten to chapter 2 of any comic I've created 
Kinda weird, I have to sayI know, not a lotta words...but that's because a scene like this doesn't need em. And in case you didn't notice the black gutters, yes, this is still Naruto's flashback/retelling of what happened on their mission
Page 2 will be out sometime...but not until I can catch up on a few other things first.
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It's a very dramatic opening to Chapter 2! I hope you continue with this soon. This is one of my favorite Naruto fan comics.
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Thanks!
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WHEN THE GOOD PART COMEING I WANT TO SEE WHAT HAPPENED TO HINATA DID NARUTO HURT HER OR DID SOME ONE TRY TO KILL HER PLEASE HURRY AND FINISH THE COMIC PLEASE
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Post me when you have the next pages, great page and I agree the page doesn't need much words on this.
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I can't wait till your next one! This is so good!
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Cool story, I really want to see the next pages! [link]
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WOW!! I can't wait for the next page!! GREAT JOB!!!
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where is page 2 ive waited about 5 weeks
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CRAP!! i just started reading this im totally into it you better make another page seriously xDD im totally into this WHAT HAPPENS NEXT?!?! >W<
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this is much better than most of the doujinshi that ive read ! ur good 
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This seems like it could end up being a good one should keep it goin imo
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Awesome! i have been waiting for this chapter for awhile now, thanks for putting it up and i can't wait for the next one. (no rush though, take your time.) Good job on the fifth panel it was very well done and you can see the emotion in it.
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Thanks ^^ And you're welcome
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Really like this so far!! Great job!
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wow, this page came out magnificently! especially the last panel. this page certainly doesn't need words to express what's going on.
though now i'm worried about what's going to happen >.<
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Thanks ^^ I'm happy you liked it. Just wait and see
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Oooh, quite intense. So if it was an old hideout of Oro's, does that mean someone else was in it? Ol' Roach wouldn't have just torn hostages apart, he'd use them in his most horrible experiments until it killed them.
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Yup, Orochimaru's dead in this doujin. These are the new inhabitants of his hideout ^^
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Omigooooowd!!!
I can't wait 4 next page!
Well, I can, and I will!!!
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Why do I have a feeling that I'm going to be proved right very soon?
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woww!! that is soo gorgeous!!! i am especially captivated by the second last panel!! i can practically feel Naruto's rage!! thumbs up to you!!!
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vixenTfox is very direct and honest!
anyway the page is fantastic, a big mistake is on the road!
when the rage dominates you, nothing can't stop you, either friend either enemy
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WOW! That took a long time to make, but it was really worth it. Great Work Pal! Really Great Work!
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love can't wait until the next one!
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i mean love it hehe
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it's been... long enough...
this world is...
oh... good stuff...
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OH! I forgot to mention.. this has been VCFD'd!
I so wanted to keep up the Spirit Song one with the Kitchi and Ayasha for a while, but this is better and I'm going to do it! So...
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OKAY! WOW! I MUST SAY... YOU ARE GETTING BETTER AND BETTER!
Again, just like last time, I see that when you take time to do things right, they turn out to be the most awesome thing ever created! 
Panel, by panel, I see the excellence of your work.
One thing I would note as a small 'mistake', that really isn't a mistake, but may actually be an advancement of how good you really are.... It was hard to tell if I was supposed to read this right to left... or left to right. I think it would have been more dramatic if it was supposed to be read left to right.. however it sort of works right to left also, though the first two and last two panels would have to be switched to give it the dramatic beginning and end that you were probably looking for. But ignore this.. I just probably read too much right to left manga, and am just confused.
Back to praising your awesome work....
(reading it left to right now)
I like how you perfectly set things up.
1st Panel: Excellent. We can already see that Naruto is going Kyuubi by the darkening and thickening of his whisker marks. I love how you have the surprise/noticing something suddenly marks on Hinata the way they would be if this was Kishimoto's actual work. Most fan artists would either leave out or not make them very dramatic or noticable, as you have done here. Also you have Naruto quivering in rage and sorrow. That is another thing that most fan artists would leave out or not make so dramatic, that Kishimoto would definitely have in. All the coloring is excellently done, giving it a realistic three 3-D effect. I can just see this put into action as if it were an anime scene rather that just a flat manga panel. It's like I can see Hinata's sudden noticing how Naruto is reacting and Naruto's quivering practically right off the page!
Phew! 
2nd Panel: You can see the worry, concern, and confusion on Hinata's face. I can practically hear her thinking. 'Huh? Na-Naruto-kun? H-he is just sha-shaking.. is-is he just as afraid as m-me ri-right now?!...... Wh-Wait.. his chakra.. it-it is red?! What's going on!? Is Naruto-kun going to be okay?!...'.
Love how that even though in the first panel you had the back lighting be red, Hinata's hair shine was normal, now that he's going kyuubi her hair shimmer is red. This shows an excellent transition in action, that again, most artists would forget. I also notice that you are slowly dimming the brightness of the panels, making the scene even more realistic.
Panel 3: We can now see that Naruto has gone so far as to have the fox chakra clone covering his body. Again, we see him trembling with rage, sorrow, and inner torment. He felt so helpless, he is so angry that this guy did this, that Hinata had to see it too... he wants revenge, he wants this guy to feel the pain that those girls felt as they died. He will let the Kyuubi judge them with the wrath he possesses. 'Yes, destroy them.. destroy them all!', is the theme of this panel. I love how you had the enemy 'clones?' facing him. Doing that many of the same character is much harder than most people think. You did and excellent job in repetition here. Again the scene's brightness is dimmed even further, adding to the darkness of Naruto's feelings and what is about to happen.
Panel 4: Now we see things from the `enemy's` perspective. Naruto is no longer shivering. He has resolved to make this guy pay for what he has done. His stance though with his head down slightly, is full of anger and rage and wrath. 'Y-You bastard! You killed them! I will make you pay for that!', is the them of this panel. All of Naruto's dark emotions are now in sync with the kyuubi's wrath and hatred. Again.. you dimmed the brightness even further, to show just how dark the emotions and the situation is here. I love how you did the bubble effect here. It makes it even MORE realistic and 3-D like. The background streaking is excellently done. The text shows that looks back on his actions with regret. Even his expression shows a hint of regret. It displays that even though Naruto is about to lose control, he still has a heart and isn't a ruthless killer. He just wants the pain to stop, and the demon fox within him just reacts in sync with his own reaction. 'Kill or be killed' instinct is what is the focus here.
Last Panel: FINALLY! The close up of the Kyuubified eye! This is the most dramatic of transitions! This is the height of even Kishimoto's work! You when from dark and the last of his control slipping away, to full bodied resolve to destroy in just one panel. In Panel 4, Naruto is finishing up his reflection, consideration, and probably his little 'chat' with the Kyuubi... now he's going to act on his feelings! The colors, the dimming, the action lines are all perfect! Especially the eye itself and the action lines are well done. The shining red wrath in the Kyuubified eye, and the perfect amount, length, and spacing of the action lines are well thought out. Also as I look at this again, I notice his whisker mark is perfectly well placed. It blends with the action marks but isn't confused with the action marks. This is hard to do! Making something like this, that is drawn in the same direction not melt into something else. You did a good job of keeping them separate, yet making sure the focus remained on the action lines drawing you to his eye. I also notice now that you still kept the bubble effect, without it detracting from the focus. Also everything again, seems to jump out at me. I even noticed that you had the edge of his hitai-aite perfectly placed and made sure that it had the proper thickness shown. Heck! I'm not even sure Kishimoto would remember such a small detail when all the focus should be on the eye! Again... this has been an excellent page with a dramatic and cliffhanger end to it. It makes I, as the reader hyper and anxious for the next page!
Overall.. I think you the most professional job in fan art that I have ever seen! I can't wait until you DO become a full professional and get that Spirit Song story published!
Give us moar! MOAR NOW PLZ!
I hope your eyeballs haven't fallen out. Sorry for such a long and extended comment. I'll shut up now. >_<
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Wow....I dun think I've ever read a better comment. XD I'm actually not sure where to begin a reply...
So I'll just say thank you so much!
Oh, and SpiritSong will be starting very soon
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Actually I noticed an error after I sent that.. Panel three: his Clan Swirl patch is missing. Though this is viewed from a direct back view, it still should be able to see the edge of it, as you did with panel one.
Other than that.. excellent job.
I am your other half.. of course I can read your mind!
I knew that, I just am hyper to see the first real pages!
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Yeah, I saw that too
I'm excited to MAKE the first real pages too XD I just need to get these darn previous commitments out of the way first
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Yeah.. just remember it next time. I don't think anyone else noticed or cared.
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finally you have done it very grateful to my curiosity is defeated ... and when the others
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I waited forever and it's finally out! YESS!!!!!!!
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nice page!
just one thing: I think its clever how you colored Hinata's hair in panel 2. you can easily overlook the change of the color in the light when you draw. I know I do somethimes.. so thumbs up!!
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