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Published: 2003-08-25 01:59:10 +0000 UTC; Views: 154; Favourites: 4; Downloads: 17
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Able to cause my smile to frown.I dug my hole. Kept falling down.
My foolish eyes and feelings; weak,
Had formed a need I had to seek.
Of hurt, tears, taunts and loss you reek.
Which in the end had left me bleak.
You noticed me, I won’t deny.
I saw the stare within your eye.
Afraid to speak. My lips held dust.
I was fell in like. Ashamed of lust.
And now the ring is forming rust.
My punishment for granting trust.
You’re the mistake. I hold remorse.
You ran away on your white horse.
You’re beautiful. I still repeat.
I sigh. I whine. I state defeat.
You are the memory I greet,
As I head in. Admit I’m beat.
I wonder why I give a damn.
I had been nothing. Will be. Am.
© Sylwia Wielgosz 2003.
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Comments: 14
And now im lost left so alone
for these sins i cant atone
to you im left bereft, unknown
my love erodes, till dust, windblown
heheh i felt poetic and i loved the rhyme scheme so dont mind if i had to add an ending for myself. I really like the poem.
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I love it! 
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Marvelous darling, you just keep getting better eh ?
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WHOA! this is really good. i absolutely love it. your rhyming was brilliant, i love the way the rhythm goes. i especially love the last two lines, they really hit me hard
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o.O i like it... i really like the line "my lips held dust"
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Thanks. Hee, hee. Reminds me of mummies ...
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Awe struck. really sylwia, this has to be your *best*, a word i dont use lightly. i mean, you have every element that an excellent poem has, wonderful imagry, great descriptions, a flawles rythem, and i adore the subject amnner.
you know, the rock cold definintion fo good writting is the correct placement of words and sentences which forms a pleasing effect to the eye and mind, which makes me think that real, true good writters can't exist. is it possible for someone to create this...seemingly perfect formation.
Yes.
Your talent amazes me yet again. This is definitly a favorite.
(don't you like my use od drama? it could be a freakin soap! exxept its true!) if there is a soap,there shouyld be a moose.
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You fucking rock, Katie.
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wow!! thats amazing!!
And now the ring is forming rust.
My punishment for granting trust.
me likes this part!! marvelous job u little genius u!
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