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Published: 2003-12-06 01:19:07 +0000 UTC; Views: 137; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 23
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Description Screaming child.
Uncaring mother.
Who will hold her hand?

Dropped her doll.
Dropped her blanket.
Dropped her will to stand.

Scorching tears.
Aching tongue.
Arms that scraped the floor.

Hurt her pride.
Hurt herself.
Hurt desired more.

Laughter kills.
Touching burns.
Hugging breaks the heart.

Say you love.
Say you care.
Say you’ll fall apart.

Smiling frown.
Pompous guilt.
Sightless was her glare.

Touch her tears.
Touch her scabs
Touch what had been there.

Pointless bawls.
Useless hopes.
Straightforward falsehood.

Grabbed the doll.
Grabbed the blanket.
Grabbed her legs and stood.

© Sylwia Wielgosz 2003.
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fragilefacade - The Eighth Of March
Comments: 12

Chica-X [2007-01-14 04:59:00 +0000 UTC]

That is a beautiful piece, thanks for sharing.

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tragicrabbit [2004-01-22 23:11:54 +0000 UTC]

that's amazing, very different from what i'm used to reading. your lines are short and to the point, not overly wordy but not lacking in substance either. great concept

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fragilefacade In reply to tragicrabbit [2004-01-23 00:21:55 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! I was worried it sounded too child-like.

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poet-of-da-north [2003-12-18 03:49:43 +0000 UTC]

;_; is so touching... and yea it isn't like your other writings which is nice... i liked it a lot

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fragilefacade In reply to poet-of-da-north [2003-12-18 22:21:53 +0000 UTC]

Thank you. It means a lot to me to hear that something I wrote touched someone. I appreciate it.

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poet-of-da-north In reply to fragilefacade [2003-12-22 14:41:25 +0000 UTC]

glad i could help

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voices [2003-12-06 12:23:44 +0000 UTC]

i already did a comment for this is quite negeative i moaned about how i couldnt find any meaning and how it was all just a words on a screen to me, however even then i knew there was something more, so i didnt give up i read it over and over again. I got the feeling that in each stanza there was more than one person. I have to give it you, this is a brave poem, this isnt your normal type, espically in the format of the poem, i always like to see writers changing, trying out new things and youve given it a go here, and for that you deserve a pat on the back.

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fragilefacade In reply to voices [2003-12-06 14:47:01 +0000 UTC]

That's exactly why I mentioned to keep an open mind while reading this. I'm glad you got to the core of it. And thank you.

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nxoxtxhxixnxg [2003-12-06 01:57:19 +0000 UTC]

wow. this is incredible. one of the best i've read from you. your word usage is very impactful. excellent job.

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fragilefacade In reply to nxoxtxhxixnxg [2003-12-06 14:45:05 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

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LostBlueDreams [2003-12-06 01:21:09 +0000 UTC]

This is absolutly beautiful. I just love it!

Dreams~

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fragilefacade In reply to LostBlueDreams [2003-12-06 14:44:37 +0000 UTC]

Thank you. ^^

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