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Published: 2003-12-29 01:06:02 +0000 UTC; Views: 119; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 38
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His suit is wearing thinner,Each day he keeps it near.
The hours pass so slowly,
That he can barely tear.
What is there to hold on to?
What’s left for him to fear?
Holds his hand out to her,
But she can’t even hear.
The droplets keep me humid.
The sun brings me the rain.
Pretend can be a daydream,
Or a way of staying sane.
Your hand can hit my sorrow,
But what have you to gain?
The little child can cry now,
Even though the dragon’s slain.
Tied as if a necklace,
The chain around the heart.
It beats for the forbidden.
It beats although apart.
Who, at all, deciphers,
Which arrow is a dart?
The eyes have shone so sweetly.
The lipstick tasted tart.
Dear friend, why do I see you?
Why undergo my mind?
I cannot see the showers.
I cannot feel the bind.
The hands are laced together,
In fingers they can’t find.
Why overlap inside me,
When I cannot be kind?
The laugher echoes softly,
Within the vacant head.
The messenger is shot and,
The letter’s left unread.
Memorized desires.
Ignored what I have said.
Perfect happy-ending;
Tucked me right into bed.
© Sylwia Wielgosz 2003.
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Comments: 14
tragicrabbit [2004-01-21 11:20:55 +0000 UTC]
aww.. that makes me sad. but it's good to read your work again
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fragilefacade In reply to tragicrabbit [2004-01-21 22:00:50 +0000 UTC]
Thank you. I'm glad it brought out some type of emotion.
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acidangel [2003-12-29 23:13:45 +0000 UTC]
I agree about the seperation part, but i couldnt know the kind of it.
Its a very well written piece tho, very epic, even tho you dont rite like this. Well done Syl.
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fragilefacade In reply to acidangel [2003-12-29 23:45:06 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! I really appreciate that.
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voices [2003-12-29 19:53:20 +0000 UTC]
i didnt think it was about father + daughter seperation, i thought it was about, a man who is living a lonely life, and keps on harking back to a love a long time ago and no matter how he hard he dries, he just seems to drifting into oblivion, thats my idea, then again only u really know, or do u? i have no idea what im writing about half of the time, maybe these were just images u struck together.
this was a techinally flawless, i really couldnt stop reading it, because it was gripping,
thanks for posting!
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fragilefacade In reply to voices [2003-12-29 23:41:55 +0000 UTC]
My friend has an obsession with isnulting everyone and their way of life. He tends to hate everyone he sees but a very good example of his hatred goes towards people who work nine to five and don't have much of a life. I tried to take that and show this friend of mine that the suit-wearing, suitcase-carrying "sell-out" is a person too.
Even with that, I included a lot of thoughts I had flying around my head at once. The longing for a former ... idol. The way I cry when it's beautiful and laugh when it's sad. Random, random little messages that I try to get over to people so I can feel heard even if I am not.
I understand most of what I write. I make it my obsession to understand myself.
Thank you for commenting and complementing. I don't know you bu for some strange reason, your opinion means something to me. Maybe it's because you're not afraid to tell me how you really feel about my work. Thank you for that.
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voices In reply to fragilefacade [2003-12-30 00:02:49 +0000 UTC]
I make it my obsession to understand myself.
i used to be like that, nearly led to my destruction infact, these days tho, just let it be, i dont like thinking i cant sleep when i do, "the more you know about politics the more dissapointed ull be" a quote a teacher gave me an apply it to life,
ignorance really is bliss.
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fragilefacade In reply to voices [2003-12-30 00:31:40 +0000 UTC]
I agree that ignorace is bliss. I live my life pretending everything isn't as bad as it really is. However, knowing myself gives me a certain ... I don't know how to put this. Knowing myself makes me feel like not everything is going to let me down ... I wonder if that makes any sense since I let myself down a lot of the time. I guess since I'm really all I have, understanding myself is the only thing keeping me away from suicide.
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pandachan [2003-12-29 15:53:41 +0000 UTC]
You always write so perfectly with the way you express emotion. I agree with ~ metalmistress thinking its a seperation,maybe not between a father and an daughter, but something more.
I really love this poem. Its wonderful You're an amazing writer
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fragilefacade In reply to pandachan [2003-12-29 23:37:10 +0000 UTC]
Thank you for the comment and fave. It had tiny messages clumped together but the gist of it was my longing for someone I can never have. A dear old friend.
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metalmistress [2003-12-29 01:38:55 +0000 UTC]
woah...such a clever, well put rhyme scheme.
i love this poem, i truely do.
sadly, i begin to feel like im understanding the theme of this piece but then i realise i truely have no idea. that saddens me.
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fragilefacade In reply to metalmistress [2003-12-29 02:01:29 +0000 UTC]
Tell me what you think. You might be right.
Thank you for the comment, it means a lot coming from you
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metalmistress In reply to fragilefacade [2003-12-29 02:58:07 +0000 UTC]
all i get is a father-daughter seperation.
bah i suck.
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fragilefacade In reply to metalmistress [2003-12-29 23:35:25 +0000 UTC]
It is about seperation, just as important as father-daugther. See? You don't suck at all.
Though pieces of it were random messages I tried to show my friend. Don't think they got through, though.
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