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Published: 2006-01-30 23:00:09 +0000 UTC; Views: 319; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 4
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Description The Om Grove


          The twilight sky above the grove made the time of day unclear: was it day or dusk? It was certainly unnatural, the motley collection of characters drinking bitter green tea, some on mats, others leaning against the smooth, pliable bark of young trees. Two impossibly translucent men, one tall and dark (at least, in his current state), the other shorter and unmistakably Asian, stood without cups, watching the others. Two equally see-through women stood, talking animatedly, the plain one slightly more subdued than her gorgeous friend. A wiry black girl argued with two fat, lazy-looking young men, one dark, one a pale yellow. One meek Asian girl, too thin, sat next to an old Asian man radiating peace, who met her fast, impassioned questions with simple answers and a smile.
          "And are we really here to see the ghosts?" came her quick words.
          "No," Siddhartha replied, taking a draught of tea. "We are here because we are not elsewhere."
          The girl frowned, then thought and returned her features to a state of rest. Her father, the eldest of the ghosts, looked over at the girl he had sold many years before and bowed his head, but not before his homely ghost-wife shot him a resigned glance, in one of Kamala's pauses.
          Okonkwo, the black man-ghost, gazed at his daughter as she almost-playfully shoved Wang Lung's son. She did his memory proud, packing up and moving her father's body to a hole she herself had dug. If he had known how, he would have smiled.
          "Why aren't they drinking tea?" the girl's voice rang out. On closer inspection she was no girl, but a woman of twenty-six or -seven years, who only seemed young in ways her mother never had. Her indentured servitude was over quickly and she married a city man who widowed her, leaving her money and no sons or daughters. She took her chance and followed Gotama the Buddha, before settling in and learning from Siddhartha instead. "Well?"
          "They don't need tea," Siddhartha replied. O-lan and Wang Lung were now side by side, she worldlessly helping him walk, he looking grateful but tough. Kamala tried to charm Okonkwo, but he was past petty flesh, and tired of her prattle. He listened when she spoke of hating rich idleness, but when she did not mention white men, he lost interest. Wang Lung's son looked terrified of Okonkwo's daughter, who was now chiding him for being unable to climb trees or plant a good crop. Her brother, who she had previously been talking to, looked longingly at his father, whose death had only pushed him further into Christianity.
          As the light grew bluer, those who belonged to each other gravitated towards each other. Okonkwo's son and daughter stood on either side of their father, who grew less substantial by the second. Wang Lung and O-Lan stood near their daughter and surviving son. Kamala sat next to Siddhartha, who was still underneath his tree, face blank but warm. Their languages bled into one thick mess of sound, words rearranging to become one perfect hum of Om.
          The grove did not exist the next day, just as it never had before, and has not since.
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Comments: 14

drowning-slowly [2006-03-14 14:53:13 +0000 UTC]

We are here becasue we are not elsewhere.

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fragilemacabre In reply to drowning-slowly [2006-03-14 21:19:06 +0000 UTC]

Yep.

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drowning-slowly In reply to fragilemacabre [2006-03-14 21:37:39 +0000 UTC]

^^ I love that line

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fragilemacabre In reply to drowning-slowly [2006-03-15 20:55:39 +0000 UTC]

I worked on it. Hard. Lots of thought.

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drowning-slowly In reply to fragilemacabre [2006-03-15 21:17:34 +0000 UTC]

it payed off

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Aladdin-Sane [2006-02-01 20:10:51 +0000 UTC]

The first and last two paragraphs are gorgeous.

Not certain I like the lazy zen of the dialogue though.

I agree with `diamondie anyway.

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fragilemacabre In reply to Aladdin-Sane [2006-02-01 20:46:34 +0000 UTC]

The dialogue was thrown together hastily. Way too coffee-table Zen for me, usually, but hell, I was bored.

Thanks.

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diamondie [2006-01-30 23:10:41 +0000 UTC]

I'm embarrassed to admit I haven't read any of those books (though I've heard of Hesse's novel, of course). This is really good, perhaps the best thing you've ever written, even though it's hard to compare to your poetry. The description is very lively and I like your word choices a lot. The beginning and ending are brilliant and I like the way the piece is so very short.

Oh, and while reading this I thought to myself that you really have to read Aldous Huxley's Island.

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fragilemacabre In reply to diamondie [2006-01-30 23:20:16 +0000 UTC]

I probably should read Huxley. I'm in the middle of Pirsig's Zen and the Art of Motorcycle Maintenance at the moment, it's a struggle but I will make it through. The good kind of struggle, where you read a page or a paragraph and then go on your own tangential thoughts, so the book is abandoned.


Don't be embarrassed. Things Fall Apart isn't the best thing ever written. Siddhartha is worth the read. And I know you get fatigued or I'd Chinese-water-torture you from the US into reading The Good Earth, but I'll spare you (just this once).



Most of my writing of late has been short of necessity, because the teacher I have for both this class (World Literature) and my writing class (Advanced Placement English Language and Expression) is a stickler for conciseness; typed essays are to hover near 500 words, and handwritten, in-class essays are to remain to both sides of one wide-ruled page (though he allowed us to go over to one extra half page on this one). My handwriting is large and wide-spaced (though it cramps up on thin-ruled paper), so anything I type up from a class assignment will be tiny.



Thanks for commenting.

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starkreality [2006-01-30 23:03:19 +0000 UTC]

This didnt show up in my message center, but I saw it on the main page XD

I had to do something kind of like this, only it was an extracurricular thing called power of the pen... Do you have that? We practiced and practiced, and when we finally went to competition, I bombed 2 out of 3 prompts XD

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fragilemacabre In reply to starkreality [2006-01-30 23:09:43 +0000 UTC]

We don't have that. At all.

Dear, don't bomb things.


I'm glad someone clicked it from the main page

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starkreality In reply to fragilemacabre [2006-01-30 23:16:12 +0000 UTC]

well as soon as I commented, it showed up in my message center...

get on MSN

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fragilemacabre In reply to starkreality [2006-01-30 23:22:38 +0000 UTC]

I can't use any messengers, I'm at work. If I'm home, I'm on a messenger, you know that.

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starkreality In reply to fragilemacabre [2006-01-31 00:20:17 +0000 UTC]

well...call in sick XD

and, yes, i know youre already there

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