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Published: 2009-04-09 23:26:31 +0000 UTC; Views: 173; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 6
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EmptynessI feel so empty inside
but with everything to hide
I have no one to look up to
I dont even have a help guide
Everyone has a besty at school
but Im not hip, Im not cool
so my best friend probably regrets being mine
she acts like shed rather jump in a pool
from 7:50 till 2:20m I feel so alone
it feels like Im at the tip of a cone
struggling to fined my balance, to not fall off
its like that monday through friday till I get home
so its that way...
everyday
when I make mistakes
people say I will pay
people hate me
they say not annoying and nicer, I need to be
I have messed up and learned stuff, but they say I lie
how people treat me, makes me feel empty
Comments: 5
I suggest... that when you write... don't force the rhyme. Just go with the flow for now. You had some good phrases, and sometimes it fit together, but most of the time.. it didn't really work. Just let it run with your feelings, that's the best way to go.
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oh ok, thanks. Ill try to do that next time. I just love it when it rhymes XD
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yeah... Ill try to make it more flowy and make it so that it fits better XD
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