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Published: 2008-01-13 05:14:55 +0000 UTC; Views: 6146; Favourites: 102; Downloads: 92
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A little piece of perfection, congratulations on the DD, I wear mine like a badge, you should too!
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I thought this was fantastic.
Loved the trailing rhyme between the stanzas and I liked the use of gloaming, reminded me of La Belle Dame Sans Merci by Keats.
Well worth a favourite and a watch
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I really like this line...
our nights: strings that rip and tug
a common cusp of stars in sync
I also liked the ending.
I'm not sure about the word gloaming, actually. it threw me off a little.
Anyway, I like the ethereal feel to the poem. Nice!
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Ethereal is a good word; I think it is what I was going for. And yes, that "gloaming" word sure does stop a few people for a moment. Thanks!
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Hello!
This piece has been added to the collection Lipogram as it was a submission for the titled workshop.
Thank you
*Writers-Workshop
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This is rich, it's impossible to believe there is something missing, though at the same time one has the oddest feeling that something is off.
I don't really like the word "twilight"; to me "twilit" sounds softer and is an adjective, but hey this is an amazing piece, and I haven't got much of true significance to say except
Thanks for writing,
J.
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I get an odd feeling when reading this, too, and I've yet to know what to attribute it to. Thank you for reading.
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i got lost in its euphoria
my favourite way to read
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Mine, too, I admit. Thank you!
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Ha! Nicely done. I love the offbeat rhyme and the rhythm in general. In poetry I find there a lot of too-flowery tiptoeing around sex, and a lot of smearing it around like it's the dirtiest thing in town; this poem rests gracefully between.
It's always a pleasure to see just how much meaning and art can be squeezed out of a lipogram. Eunoia +fav.
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Thank you kindly, sir. 
--Take that as you will.
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Hello, Bill... Are you ever going to do anything about that pesky "the" in line two? No e's, right?
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I was wondering when someone was going to catch that! I mean, seriously.
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Yeah... I read through almost all of the comments to see if anyone has mentioned it! I guess I'll have to save all these cookies for myself!
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Wow. This is fantastic! I loved reading this poem!
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This poem is great! I think the way that your words flow into one another really enhances the mood. And the rhythm is really cool to think about, I think that maybe there are many ways to verbalize this poem and thinking about that is rather exciting. Thanks for the great lit!
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Thanks for reading! I really appreciate your feedback.
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Gorgeous work! Congrats on the DD. This is a beautiful piece that surely shows us how a lipogram should be composed...
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Thanks! I really appreciate the comment and the :+Fav:.
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beautiful - I love the build to the end - great tension and a wonderful release
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Thank you so much! I appreciate the 
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now i'm a huge fan of reading sex into almost anything, but oddly enough i didn't read any sex in this poem. i see relationships, connections, but not sex, per se.
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Look more closely, perhaps in the second and third stanzas.
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Not much ripping and tugging going on down there, either? 
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Thighs? yes. Pelvis? Butt? absolutely. Genitals? obviously. Hips? makes me think of the Bump or the Hustle or some other disco dance craze.
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Ahahahahah.
I like you, you know.
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It be things like this that make me glad I never bothered to try poetry.
I don't think my ego could handle it.
Wonderful stuff.
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Aww, thanks! (I think.)
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Well-deserved. I wish I could say more but this workshop depresses me, I try not to reminisce on it. Congratulations though!
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Aww, why does it depress you? (And thank you very much.)
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Because my entry was... not the best.
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Very nice, i like the line "our plans from hands to holding" i don't know why though. Good Job
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