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Published: 2009-07-20 22:29:19 +0000 UTC; Views: 106; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 0
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note to self:come back, i miss you.
but really, you canβt quite put that on the back of a milk carton, can you?
(and maybe this is all just a parody of real life)
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Ah ha.
Very simple, but as I've always said, there's power in simplicity. The beginning lines, as I interpret them, speak about how you know something is wrong, but you don't know how to go about fixing it. That's life all over, of course, which is the point that your final line and the negative space before it drive home. This is quite instrospective and packs a powerful punch.
I'm back, by the way. In case you can't tell.
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Good to see you back! And still in your stride, I see. Basically you have said it better than I could have; the last line, however, was written to show the sense of detachment and unreality that comes with having "lost yourself". And yes, based, as always, on experience. I suppose we should be grateful that I'm updating less, shouldn't we?
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Haha, grateful wouldn't be my choice of descriptor.
Things based on experience can often be the most powerful. An author once told me that the best piece of advice she could offer was to write what you know.
I should be editing your story right now, so I'll get back to that. 
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Well, as you choose, I suppose.
You know, I used to totally hate that piece of advice. I wanted to write about places nobody knew about, least of all me. Now... at the very least it's a way to purge emotion. Cathartic, I guess you could say.
I would love something else of yours to read and edit while you're working on mine - at least that way I have the semblance of feeling useful.
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I know, me too. I used to think that writing was all about escaping your own life and creating another...but really, I've found now that it's about channeling your life, not ignoring it all together.
Ahaha, well, I will send some stuff momentarily then. I just have to finish homework first. 
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Yeah... all the best stories I've read have made me love something, and that's usually because the author loved it too.
Well, send away! I think I can promise that I'll always be honest, so you are hopefully in good hands.
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Errrrr, so so sorry. I need to review it, I even printed it out this time! Garr, I will have it done by Wednesday, promise! And send you some stuff of my own, of course.
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It's okay, it's okay. All I really want is some of your stuff, because I miss reading really good prose and of course I always love poetry.
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Awww. Ok, I'll cave I suppose.
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<333 Mmm. I like how this is so open to interpretation, even if you have your own personal meaning for it.
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Thanks. This wasn't really all that great, just kind of some lines.
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No no - I swear, these poems you write could be published if you sent them somewhere. They're more than great. I simply don't have the words to describe them. <333
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-stares at ceiling-
I don't even know what to say to that except that you are perhaps biased.
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DDD: Butbut... they are!
And ya better believe it! x0 Stubbornity shall obtain victory!
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Stubbornity? Is that even a word?
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i really like how you refer to putting that on the back of a milk carton... your so clever :].
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anytime dear xD.
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I really don't know what to say, except write more. More good stuff! I never know if I'm making the right interpretations, but I like the meanings I do pull from them. ^^ Love the nostalgic tone, of course, and your simple ways of saying so much.
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Thanks! This one was pretty much open to interpretation, anyway. Just out of curiosity, how did you interpret it?
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Dang, you have to ask the question? Well, it hit me on a personal level because I feel like I've lost a chunk of what made me who I am. But this seems to be saying something along those lines, with a sense of loneliness and a little insecurity. A plea for things to go back to the way they were but the third line is asking how.
I missed the meaning of the final line, though, unless you're making it clearer that this is an analogy. But that seems to state the obvious a little, so I'm not sure.
It's a good piece, provokes a little self-exploration.
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That (losing a chunk of myself) was basically the feeling that prompted this poem. You got what I was trying to say perfectly. The last line was trying to communicate the feeling of disconnection that came with the feeling of losing myself. Sort of not quite feeling part of life anymore.
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