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Published: 2009-04-15 17:13:06 +0000 UTC; Views: 307; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 4
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His friends are so goofy, I loled at the panel 7
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hehe I'm glad you are having fun
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Mt bom...mas parece q eles nunca viram uma rapariga
XD
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hahahahah
Na verdade sim, mas Γ© que essa em especial foi de uma beleza superior aos olhos deles heheheh
Γ aquela tΓ
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Uiiiii....
Tou a ver q sim
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hehehahaha
Simplesmente, existem garotas que se destacam
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num é ...é que a calça dela ta tão embaixo que parece qe vai aparecer os pelos pubianos dela! ai eles ficam na espectativa!
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hahah XD agora entendi tudo...e tem logica XD
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In panel 6, I think it would make more sense if you said "You're more than welcome," which is a shortened, less formal version of "You are more than welcome to sit here."
Regarding panel 3... I think someone his age would say "Why would I do that?!" instead of "Why would I do such thing?!" If you keep it as it is, then at least edit it to "Why would I do such a thing?!" "Such a thing" gives things a formal feeling, and teens don't really use it unless for: a) comedic effect, or b) they are well-read.
I like the panelling you did on this page. The reader gets the feeling of time passing, but it's not too cluttered or anything. Once again, you did a great job with your expressions here! XD
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hummm yeah yeah...I will follow you, this is more than great clues hehe
You know I have a big difficult with the manners who the kids use to talk because I don't have a close contact with them...well, let's continue this corrections any time you see if it needs
Thanks for the praises!!
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yay..finally.....n oh yea...English fixing again 
"Hey buddy! At least you should disguise that you like her"
could be changed too
"Hey bud!(or buddy is fine) At least you should hide that you like her"
and
:Have anybody seated here?" sounds very ...bad english.. make it
"Does anyone sit here?" or "Has anyone taken this seat?" ....i like "does anyone sit here"
the guys reply shud not be "no no! you can caught this place!" it should be
"No no! you can have it!" orrrr "No no! Its all yours"
there are also many other ways to rite...but these are fine.
and LAST one here is....the "You are the most welcome"
you dont add "THE" in there...jus "You are more welcome" ..thats good
n thats bout it
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does anyone sit here?
lolololololololololol
It hurts me lolololololol
Thanks again!
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