thecorr [2004-08-07 23:34:34 +0000 UTC]

i could just imagine some old man sitting on a park bench thinking...about his life..about what he has left, about what he's done...i dont know, but it's something beautiful but not sad. i make no sense, but i really like this style Aaron. i like how it's not easy to follow and how you can really get a lot of different things out of it. i really relate to this poem right now. awesome job...and i say...get more poetry up man.

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johnhawks [2004-08-07 04:36:59 +0000 UTC]

This is a really interesting concept in poetry...I hope to read more!

-JH

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catnipmouse [2004-08-07 04:17:53 +0000 UTC]

I love it Aaron... I especially adore "And Tomorrow ? Today’s end ? "

They are words I would want to put into my paintings.

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shallowinnocence [2004-08-06 21:35:49 +0000 UTC]

rawr...this is like the third or fourth time im trying to post this so im sorry if it ends up showing up like ten times in the end...


ok i wasn't done.....it also sounds like they're trying to find some sort of meaning in 'today', which in the end does not work because trying to find meaning in one day is like trying to build a puzzle without all the pieces, but because they are so impatient for one reason or another they fail to think long enough about the matter to realize that its all futile anyway, and so get very frustrated and disheartened...and so the flow once again works well for that since its very short, pointed thoughts.....anyway...now im done..i promise....but was that annoying enough for ya or like completely wrong or anything? huh huh?!

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shallowinnocence [2004-08-06 20:55:55 +0000 UTC]

thats schnazzy...the like staccato-ish flow is cool and works..its like someone who thinks in really short little spurts or is like really impatient who has had no time to stop and think throughout the day, but now that he does its still hurried thinking and not extremely detailed thoughts...least thats what i got from it.... see..but when you have some good mackinac fudge (peanut butter if you wish ) you will be all happy and relaxed and laid back.....ooooooh :: dreams about fudge :: .oh gah...that has nothing to do with your writing! im done now.... :: runs off ::

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