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GrimmestFangs — Morphine Part I
Published: 2009-06-22 19:13:49 +0000 UTC; Views: 1474; Favourites: 57; Downloads: 4
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Description This is the story of a girl named Morphine:

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"Morphine, Morphine, Morphine, that's who I am, but," She mumbles, " why can't I see through the threaded clouds?"

Morphine was once a youth who could ignite a smile in the rain and counter even the most morbid of frowns. Now, she is a youth of vacant hope and cob-web dreams- she can't even ignite her own smile.
Currently her eyes are too sad. Her skin, too pale. She knows this isn't her. This can't be her.
Morphine began biting her lips when she knew she would taste the star-filled nights, now when she does, she just tastes the tart skin of a ghost.
Her arms used to rival the world and spin with the blossoms, now their bone-thin, and weak, and bloodied.
( She feels certain that, that is not natural)
When she drew the blinds of her window before, every-thing in her room was filled with crayon-box colors and drowned in crystalline glitter; now she draws the blinds and the room gets darker, and darker, and darker. (She still doesn't understand)

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"Morphine, Morphine, Morphine, that's who I am, but," She says rolling it off of her tongue, "remember when I could dream of the fire leaves in Autumn?"

Morphine knows about her orange lantern cheeks and cherry blossom eyes; she wants them back. She doesn't want her new blue-bruise cheeks and her raw-frigidity eyes.
Morphine doesn't like her current portrait. She just wishes with a click of her heels, that it could all be gone. Forever more.

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"I'm not pretty," she tells herself, " now I'm just Morphine..."

Morphine knows she can be more like the old her. It isn't impossible. She can change as soon as she finds herself...


One day, she'll be the same, and all those storm-clouds will wash away; and the sun, just maybe, will resurface.
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Comments: 175

YourWickedClown [2010-01-02 17:41:07 +0000 UTC]

This is very amazing! Is it based on someone you know?

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GrimmestFangs In reply to YourWickedClown [2010-01-04 22:29:16 +0000 UTC]

no, no.
~ thank you

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seussical-love [2009-11-23 01:36:03 +0000 UTC]

I know too many Morphines in this world.

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GrimmestFangs In reply to seussical-love [2009-11-23 01:37:00 +0000 UTC]

D:

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Reila13 [2009-11-14 04:44:53 +0000 UTC]

i love ur writing style. i wish i could right as well as u do!! nice piece of work

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GrimmestFangs In reply to Reila13 [2009-11-14 14:02:39 +0000 UTC]

really? Thank you

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IKilledTheDumpling [2009-10-04 19:46:40 +0000 UTC]

Wow, this was amazing, but sad I loved it!

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GrimmestFangs In reply to IKilledTheDumpling [2009-10-05 19:27:07 +0000 UTC]

thank you

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palleor [2009-09-12 23:56:40 +0000 UTC]

Very good poem! I love the symbolism and imagery!

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GrimmestFangs In reply to palleor [2009-09-14 21:19:40 +0000 UTC]

thank you

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palleor In reply to GrimmestFangs [2009-09-14 22:11:39 +0000 UTC]

You are so very welcome!

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hondinu [2009-09-06 19:14:53 +0000 UTC]

i think this is the best.

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GrimmestFangs In reply to hondinu [2009-09-07 13:40:30 +0000 UTC]

thank you ;]

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123guitarman [2009-08-14 14:13:25 +0000 UTC]

whoooooaaaa..... i wonder what changed her...

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GrimmestFangs In reply to 123guitarman [2009-08-14 14:17:22 +0000 UTC]

It is for the reader to decide :]

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LightlyDarkened [2009-08-08 22:39:28 +0000 UTC]

Very haunting style. It's interesting, the way drugs take hold.

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GrimmestFangs In reply to LightlyDarkened [2009-08-08 22:44:43 +0000 UTC]

That's a way of seeing it, but it wasn't based on drugs at all, it didn't really have moral reasoning anyways but you drew a great idea.

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the-way-to-me [2009-07-18 21:36:14 +0000 UTC]

true all can change; as long as there is hope, anything is possible

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GrimmestFangs In reply to the-way-to-me [2009-07-19 00:32:53 +0000 UTC]

:]

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the-way-to-me In reply to GrimmestFangs [2009-07-19 05:23:17 +0000 UTC]

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xmysecretcankillmex [2009-07-15 01:34:47 +0000 UTC]

so much freaking imagery.
this was amazing, dont stop writing.
because you have major talent. i wish i could sum up half the amount of talent as you. your amazing this piece of literature is amazing i love it.

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GrimmestFangs In reply to xmysecretcankillmex [2009-07-15 15:17:45 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much

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xmysecretcankillmex In reply to GrimmestFangs [2009-07-15 16:02:26 +0000 UTC]

no prob.

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IncandescentOutline [2009-07-14 17:26:43 +0000 UTC]

I realllyyyy enjoy this

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GrimmestFangs In reply to IncandescentOutline [2009-07-14 19:49:05 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much :]

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blonde-eyed-blue [2009-07-13 23:51:51 +0000 UTC]

Your style of writing, is interesting. There are some broken sentances. It is an interesting concept; what inspired this? It seems like you are disconnected of the subject. There is not a ton of things to do to change it. The plot seems a little weak.

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GrimmestFangs In reply to blonde-eyed-blue [2009-07-14 01:38:27 +0000 UTC]

Inspiration? Myself sort of.

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blonde-eyed-blue In reply to GrimmestFangs [2009-07-14 03:29:55 +0000 UTC]

That is intersting...your mind works in interesting ways.

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GrimmestFangs In reply to blonde-eyed-blue [2009-07-14 15:55:25 +0000 UTC]

Well, thank you :]

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blonde-eyed-blue In reply to GrimmestFangs [2009-07-15 00:20:16 +0000 UTC]

You are welcome.

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JaneBee [2009-07-10 23:12:05 +0000 UTC]

I feel really bad for Morphine, which was strange, I didn't expect to feel for someone that doesn't exist like that. Imagine everything getting darker and blacker when you open your curtains
Good job, Jane xxxxxxxxxxxxx

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GrimmestFangs In reply to JaneBee [2009-07-11 00:34:07 +0000 UTC]

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Magical-Shura [2009-07-09 16:19:46 +0000 UTC]

aaawwwwnnn how cute!!

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GrimmestFangs In reply to Magical-Shura [2009-07-09 16:20:18 +0000 UTC]

:]

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writing-to-write [2009-07-09 16:09:34 +0000 UTC]

This is very well writen!
I feel bad for her....
You made her seem so real with your word choice and your describtions.
Really amazing job!

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GrimmestFangs In reply to writing-to-write [2009-07-09 16:12:42 +0000 UTC]

:]

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writing-to-write In reply to GrimmestFangs [2009-07-09 16:20:01 +0000 UTC]

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failkat [2009-07-09 15:58:55 +0000 UTC]

This is fantastic! Very beautifully written

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GrimmestFangs In reply to failkat [2009-07-09 16:04:02 +0000 UTC]

:]

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arya-76 [2009-07-09 13:38:21 +0000 UTC]

"orange lantern cheeks and cherry blossom eyes"
That's WONDERFUL wording, right there, my friend.

Cherry blossom eyes actually made me smile.

A lovely, sweet piece.

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GrimmestFangs In reply to arya-76 [2009-07-09 14:07:19 +0000 UTC]

:]

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Kagirinai-Ninjou [2009-07-09 01:09:36 +0000 UTC]

Interesting; very sad.
It sounds a little...childish, though. If that's the right word. As in, directed to a younger audience, by your word choice.
At least, in my opinion. But that gives it charm, innocence, to something otherwise.
I like it! Keep it up. ;D

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GrimmestFangs In reply to Kagirinai-Ninjou [2009-07-09 12:53:12 +0000 UTC]

Well, it sort of is- since it is about a 'younger' girl- but trust me I'll mature my writing asap ;]
Thanks though.

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saida-freestar [2009-07-08 20:16:56 +0000 UTC]

I felt sad for her, this means you make the reader believe, which is great

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GrimmestFangs In reply to saida-freestar [2009-07-08 20:50:06 +0000 UTC]

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Montplaisir [2009-07-08 00:35:54 +0000 UTC]

Hope is good...futile without action, but good to have either way..

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GrimmestFangs In reply to Montplaisir [2009-07-08 00:49:27 +0000 UTC]

Agreed ;]

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Montplaisir In reply to GrimmestFangs [2009-07-08 00:55:05 +0000 UTC]

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darth-chunky [2009-07-07 16:42:12 +0000 UTC]

I really like this, it's a huge jump from the things I am used to reading, very unique and original.

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GrimmestFangs In reply to darth-chunky [2009-07-07 23:10:33 +0000 UTC]

thanks ;]

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