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GyoShin — Spring Haikuthon
Published: 2008-03-01 22:38:47 +0000 UTC; Views: 1216; Favourites: 9; Downloads: 3
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03.01Frosty eyes -
mirror to a new sky
season meltdown.
03.02
under safe shelter,
blue moon light beams -
rain pours.
03.03
muted accordion notes
colouring white sand dreams -
some grey sunrise.
03.04
trees from the window
[curious peeking water stems]
eager to watch earth emerge.
03.05
colour squares
scrambling thoughts
the spring of you.
03.06
water beats
innocent sounds interrupted
a thunder shows.
03.07
speed -
crashes and burns...
we think.
03.08
sight can't see
the traces of quiet.
reminiscence
03.09
through crystal clear
avoiding mirror light
the metamorphosis's done
03.10
cotton mountains
they merge slowly
fog raises.
03.11
a thousand spies above
drawing dreams
tracing smiles
03.12
tender steps
paw prints and crumbs
morning feast
03.13
back and forward
stringed little road
we will follow
π
sharp words -
breaking thick ice
open soft feelings
03.15
flying fast
mislead from home,
a flock of ideas
03.16
cherry blossom hair
soft and ageing
wise in depth
03.17
singing bells
the sun will listen -
part home
03.18
bumble bees
early morning announce
to caramel birds
03.19
sun-flakes fall
through bright light
winter's last breath
03.20
stolen sand,
yellow grass -
blooming now.
03.21
green skin
not to spring
but life
03.22
freckled face,
fire lining shapes -
an honest smile
03.23
ruffled thorns
suit for a lifetime
cheer hedgy!
03.24
a drop falls
tearing the sky once more
the grass freezes.
03.25
fearful runway
just a crows herd
so they say.
03.26
thin arms,
a long endless tour:
we linger.
03.27
questions, answers
curious eyes observing -
an intruder.
03.28
bright sorbet,
fruity taste for the sun
blend the winter.
03.29
liquid fantasy
poured in a crystal dream cup;
olive pillows.
03.30
cold air, it whispers -
breathe in and out...
once.
03.31
invisible ties,
holding here and there
stealing my breath.
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Comments: 18
i'm slow at getting around to those who have since finished, being in the midst of a tanka April as i am, however...
i wanted to congratulate you for completing the haikuthon with a wonderful collection!
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stop randomly insulting yourself.
hoe....
and these are lovely.
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Wonderful work, I love how you've kept many of these very open, kind of enigmatic. I particularly love 11 and 15. And the alliteration throughout your haikus is excellent. Good luck finishing, keep it up!
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day 10
i like the image of mountains slowly glued into one piece as the fogs thicken. good choice of words.
day 12
aww, this is sweet. i feel the softness of the pet's paw there.
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day 20
this is sort of deep. i've been trying to figure out a story out of these few words.
day 27
last line introduces the 'intruder' very well, almost dramatic.
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whoever said "a picture is worth a thousand words" was dead wrong.
amazing, you paint with the words
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awww isaac you is very sweet little moo
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I like the second one, the image of the moon made blue by rain.
Two comments would be "why the mature filter? 
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thank you. I kind of tried to get the image of waking up to Yann Tiersen expecting to watch a colorful sunrise through the window, but only watch the cloudy sky and the snow falling... maybe it needs some edit.
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The blue moon light feels like it is fighting hard to make up for the pouring rain. I am glad the moonlight cares.
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i don't get the need for the mature content filter, but whatever floats ur boat.
nice job. short, sweet, and beautiful
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yes i would add it only if needed later - otherwise -
it's a grand day for the challenge - will see you as more are added!
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