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Published: 2009-11-05 04:47:11 +0000 UTC; Views: 224; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 4
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the mirror is cracked and etched with the extremes of one's sufferingthe graffiti is telling me
to just do it
all I hear are blades hovering overhead; it doesn't leave for ages
I've been stripped and examined to replicate something living
nothing is mine for
I can't be trusted
the sheets are freezing against the tile of this summer cell
click, click, shadow; a light flashes to make sure I'm still alive
there's a prize in my head
but I can't get it out
feed a pill to the crazies; give a tongue and a smile
until we scare you away like we scared ourselves
so eat the fear like patties
and we'll make you all better
no sleep, no truce with the lives we abhor
for we are the crazies and we must find a way
to reject
to escape
to love
to die
nothing ever works for us because
we are
we are
we are
the lives
we abhor
Comments: 7
TheForgottenKnight [2009-11-05 21:18:26 +0000 UTC]
what stolen kiss said... it got to me. that was amazing.. the use of words and the format worked really well. I relate to that so much more than I would like to admit
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hellostrangeone In reply to TheForgottenKnight [2009-11-06 01:19:16 +0000 UTC]
half the battle was admitting it.
Thank you for the comment.
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ticktickboom24 [2009-11-05 11:17:00 +0000 UTC]
wow...
words can't describe how much this relates, reaches out and touches me..
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hellostrangeone In reply to ticktickboom24 [2009-11-05 20:00:36 +0000 UTC]
I'm very glad it was able to reach you. And thank you for the favorite!
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ticktickboom24 In reply to hellostrangeone [2009-11-05 20:07:00 +0000 UTC]
you are very welcome.
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Pathos1987 [2009-11-05 09:29:15 +0000 UTC]
loved it: the format of the last two stanzas is especially tight, and the language throughout the poem captures a grim, vivid mood
and for some reason, i could see these lyrics going to a NIN song, which is a good thing, just in case you happen to hate mr. reznor lol.
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hellostrangeone In reply to Pathos1987 [2009-11-05 19:59:05 +0000 UTC]
thank you! And I take great the NIN similarity as a great compliment.
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