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Published: 2009-10-12 17:04:00 +0000 UTC; Views: 276; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 1
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Description one eye open
cycling between
yesterday's polaroids
and today's soon to be

six-sided stars
collect on autumn leaves
as a churchbell rings
only twice
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Comments: 10

nighttimebeautiful [2009-10-14 04:31:21 +0000 UTC]

this made my day, especially the second stanza. i can really see it. and the story behind two simple lines, that really got me. it gave the entire poem new meaning. wonderful meaning. and now, its like breathing winter air when i read this.

lovely, as always.

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Hyperionic-Xmissions In reply to nighttimebeautiful [2009-10-14 04:35:30 +0000 UTC]

many thanks, my friend.

another interesting note: polaroids have six sides...

now i just went and flipped it all upside-down, didn't i

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nighttimebeautiful In reply to Hyperionic-Xmissions [2009-10-14 14:05:42 +0000 UTC]

there you go again, a whole other meaning

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Hyperionic-Xmissions In reply to nighttimebeautiful [2009-10-14 15:10:59 +0000 UTC]

i personally prefer the snow version myself

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nighttimebeautiful In reply to Hyperionic-Xmissions [2009-10-15 02:59:19 +0000 UTC]

me too, it makes it feel more
crisp... crisp like snow, not
chicken, of course

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Hyperionic-Xmissions In reply to nighttimebeautiful [2009-10-15 03:04:11 +0000 UTC]

breaded, then fried
my wings of desire
like a winter's chill
crisp, so crisp
my lovely
lovely
little
chicken
wing.

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Cibbwin [2009-10-12 21:40:15 +0000 UTC]

I really love the first stanza.

I think the "churchbell rings/only twice" bit confuses me, though. What is the meaning of it?

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Hyperionic-Xmissions In reply to Cibbwin [2009-10-12 21:47:08 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for the comment, C.

really the churchbell thing is just that. i was standing out in an early season light snow and was unaware of what time it was. i used the bells to see if i could find the time as though they were from a clocktower. they only rang twice. i also had no idea why, but i thought it would be interesting to include it in a poem. i thought perhaps it could be 2pm, 2am, or just bells ringing on a cold day.

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Leurindal [2009-10-12 19:48:05 +0000 UTC]

I think that, of all your poems (at least the ones I've read), this one's closest to a haiku in spirit.

it's sweet. I like it!

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Hyperionic-Xmissions In reply to Leurindal [2009-10-12 19:50:34 +0000 UTC]

thank you! i am not a huge fan of haikus really, but yes, spirit indeed.

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