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Published: 2011-11-12 19:30:20 +0000 UTC; Views: 263; Favourites: 8; Downloads: 2
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I dance on the eggshellsof your emotions,
stunned by anguish
brought by salts of an internal sea.
Landlocked, and rigid
you'll never find my horizon.
The one I search for
furthest from us.
Swells of silence
echoing a distant
memory of freedom
asking to save me.
From the quiet, I need no escape.
Resolve carries me onward
to that slant horizon
empty of you.
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this piece...brings tears stringing. i can't tell you how much it scares me that i can relate to every single line. you two write so beautifully, and it is true...leaving someone you love behind was the hardest thing for me to do, but now that i did it...i feel free. i'd fav this piece a million or so more times if i could.
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You two do good work together, indeed.
I dance on the eggshells
of your emotions,
stunned by anguish
brought by salts of an internal sea.
I really like that. It's interesting as a whole, but it really speaks to me broken down as two separate ideas.
The idea of seeking an escape, or seeking independence of someone is interesting. I know this idea far too well, and I think you captured it nicely.
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you two work beautifully together. i love this, especially the last sentence.
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aww that's kind of sad in a way. searching for a way to leave someone behind. some people need a good leaving behind, but it's still never pleasant.
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That couldn't be more true. When I wrote the first stanza I couldn't help but wonder if my writing comes off as always sad.
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I usually feel like all my work is exactly the same. maybe it's a common sort of feeling.
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You think common is good in this case?
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well sometimes I like to pretend like I'm not so all alone in the way I feel.
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Even if sometimes we think those feelings will make us look weak or we can't handle ourselves.
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I'm not afraid of being weak, I'm only afraid that you won't understand.
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I understand a lot. I just let people see it a different way. Do you understand what I write?
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I understand from my perspective. Does that make sense? I feel like I can understand how you feel, but not feel the way you feel.
I can understand only with my head the things
that you understand with your heart.
For me, I need your words as explanations
and you can simply be, to feel the way you feel
you need not a word at all.
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That was beautiful Sam. Seriously I could write to that. It's a poem in itself.
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you can make it a note if you like.
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"stunned by anguish/ brought by salts of an internal sea" - nice.
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