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ilaria122 In reply to Cinnamon-Swirls [2017-08-31 13:37:39 +0000 UTC]

No offense i know me too that my english is bad but it's because i'm italian and the italian grammar i apply in english, like now. Even if i studied this language for for a lifetime i'm not quite sure to know it very well 😅

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Cinnamon-Swirls In reply to ilaria122 [2017-08-31 15:46:06 +0000 UTC]

That's alright. I understand. Though I feel like Rainbow wouldn't be one to gawk over her sappy emotions and would instead desperately try to hide the fact that she likes Soarin yet alone has a secret relationship with him... then again, Scootaloo basically stalks Rainbow 24/7 so she'd know either way sooner or later. XD

Since you're still new to the English language, I hope you don't mind if I correct a bit of it so you know it better next time you write.

Correct Grammar and Punctuation:

2nd panel: "Scoots, I'm going to go change for a moment, okay? Meanwhile, go right on ahead and do anything you'd like as if you were at your own house." 

3rd panel: Later that evening...

"Thanks for letting me stay, Rainbow Dash."

"No problem! I like spending time with my favorite sister."



(4th panel seems to have came a bit out of the blue also imo, but whatever. Easily fixable).

4th panel: "Y'know... you and Soarin are really awesome together. I don't get why you need to hide it from your friends. You two really are made for each other."

5th panel: *Rainbow Dash nervously blushing and smiling, but failing miserably to hide it*

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