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illecebrosajane — Sunday Morning Stranger
Published: 2003-10-15 04:04:59 +0000 UTC; Views: 278; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 37
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Description "Upon Waking up and Finding an Attractive Stranger Next to Me"

At first, a blurry haze,
Clearing up to reveal an image of sheer perfection.
"You know, you're built just like my ex-boyfriend."
One hand languidly lying upon your stomach,
The other shielding your eyes from the Sunday morning sun.
A cool breeze blows in from an open window.
"Would you mind if I slept next to you?  It's cold and I could really use some body heat."
I think these statements, but I can't bring myself to say them.
"I hardly know you, but..."
You look so good just lying there in your white t-shirt,
The shorts you wore yesterday, pair of red boxers peeking out from beneath shiny black fabric.
I am content simply watching you,
Savoring this indulgence,
But do I dare touch you and rouse you from sleep?
How could I?  You look so peaceful, so content.
I wonder what you are dreaming about.
Do you dream of me moving towards you slowly?
Do you dream of me exploring your body with tentative fingers?  My wandering hands searching for the innermost heat of your body?
Do you dream of my legs intertwining with yours as I draw you into my embrace?
Are you dreaming of me at all?
I dream of you, but I am wide awake, sitting in lotus position on the floor.
If I knew your name, it would be my mantra as I meditate, contemplating your form, harmonious with the rest of the universe.
If I knew you...
But all I can do is dream of you as you lie there in front of me.
You awaken, so I lie down once more,
Wondering if you would watch me sleep.
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Comments: 7

shia-maxwell [2006-04-30 05:49:04 +0000 UTC]

Absolutely beautiful!

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fleemer [2003-10-18 19:32:30 +0000 UTC]

Again another great piece of work ^ ^
Yet somehow, it saddens me... just me, I know why.. but anyhow. Good

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illecebrosajane In reply to fleemer [2003-10-20 00:43:37 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, it saddens me as well...especially since I found out that the guy is probably still in high school...Now I feel all yucky. Eh, it's not like a friend of mine who dated a girl in high school when he was in 8th grade. Now that was just weird.

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triptychr [2003-10-18 17:26:18 +0000 UTC]

I like the title a lot. Not "Sunday Morning Stranger" but "Upon Waking Up..." The perspective it plays out from is great, too.

The only problem I had was with the lines:
One hand languidly lying upon your stomach,/
The other shielding his eyes from the Sunday morning sun.

Since the whole rest of the poem comes from the first-person, I was confused as to whose hands were where. Oh, sounds a little kinky, I know. But it needs clarity.

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illecebrosajane In reply to triptychr [2003-10-20 00:44:56 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for pointing that out, I meant to fix some of the little things in there that I missed when I changed the voice.

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-tank [2003-10-16 01:19:56 +0000 UTC]

very well written...i love the imagery...perfectly done...great work
-tank

-=don't fear to imagine=-

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illecebrosajane In reply to -tank [2003-10-16 01:22:24 +0000 UTC]

Thanks...it's wonderful to be inspired again...

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