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Infamouskitkit — No One Can Know
Published: 2004-03-15 06:29:14 +0000 UTC; Views: 107; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 10
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Description My soul blazes tonight
and I'm chilled to the bone.
Through a uniform silence,
I'm never alone.

Inspired by you,
and the things that you say.
It scares me to Death,
but don't take it away.

Banish my light,
and drown me in dark.
Don't want to live in the grey;
I want more than a spark.

A wall stands between us,
I'm daring to climb.
I know where to go,
but don't know what I'll find.

This passion, as fire,
consumes as a whole,
I know what I'm risking,
I know there's a toll.

Pushing the limits,
and dimming the lights,
darken the days,
burn up the nights.

Can't stop this desire,
I won't fight this need.
The demon's awoken
and now comes to feed.

You've lit the match,
started something inside me.
I know I'm chained down
and you've got the key.

Developed by this,
I know that I've grown.
And though you're not here now,
I'm never alone.
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Comments: 11

mileswolf [2004-04-21 10:01:01 +0000 UTC]

Oooo what a great setup. Nice I could totally imagine this as a song.

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Infamouskitkit In reply to mileswolf [2004-04-21 23:25:20 +0000 UTC]

If I could write music, I'd attempt to set a tune to it. But alas, I can barely play someone else's songs on my guitar, much less my own.

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OsiristheJuggalo [2004-03-15 07:36:26 +0000 UTC]

The last line is almost haunting, like there is something else going on there...another poem's subject perhaps?

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Infamouskitkit In reply to OsiristheJuggalo [2004-03-15 08:04:34 +0000 UTC]

Perhaps.

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lazy-ninja [2004-03-15 06:50:29 +0000 UTC]

I like how each line flows. The shortness, and in some places the choppiness, adds to the feel of urgency. The rhymescheme works well too... on one hand the first and third not rhyming, gives it the randomness, but rhyming the second and fourth adds a steadiness. Nice work.

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Infamouskitkit In reply to lazy-ninja [2004-03-15 06:59:36 +0000 UTC]

I'm really touched. Here I was thinking, "Well Kit, here's a little place you can hide away," and not only have people found me, they have nice things to say. Thank you.

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lazy-ninja In reply to Infamouskitkit [2004-03-15 07:23:42 +0000 UTC]

I'm just glad I did find you. From what I've seen (ie your two submissions), you're quite a poet. I look forward to future stuff. And now, off to homework some more... and dream, perchance to sleep. Tata.

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lazy-ninja In reply to lazy-ninja [2004-03-15 16:07:28 +0000 UTC]

Hamlet, but inverted. Take Shakespeare, on the rocks, add a twist: Lord, what tools these mortals be... I guess because I'm special like that.

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Infamouskitkit In reply to lazy-ninja [2004-03-15 07:26:33 +0000 UTC]

Ah yes, random Shakespeare quotes. Midsummer, right?

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justinaerni [2004-03-15 06:32:58 +0000 UTC]

Great poem !. I like the rythem of it. interesting theme too. Great job on this . See you around.

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Infamouskitkit In reply to justinaerni [2004-03-15 06:34:30 +0000 UTC]

Wow. It's been up all of three minutes, and already there's something to be said. Thank you.

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