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XD there needs to be moreeee 
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that's pretty much my only role in this project. story and character designs is all I do. but im glad you enjoy it, I update every Wednesday.
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ill look through your pix l8r i just hv to get to sleep early cuz i got like 4 tests tomorrow XD school sux when tests come around
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YAY
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cool, be sure to check out the artist I've linked in the description though, I couldn't do it without them.
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I will 
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Ahhh there needs to be more DX haha
Love it so far! Interested to see what exactly is going on here.
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Can't wait for this manga to progress and to find out more about the plot!!
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I wanted to give a little constructive criticism-
First off the page looks beautiful! There is one thing that bothers me though, when he hits the tree, I'm just not sold that he hit it that hard. The artwork shows him bashing into the tree, but your "sound effect" or "action word" sorta obscures the fact that it was a rough bump, rather then highlight it. If I may suggest, if you put the letters closer together to where they almost touch, then add an exclamation point to the end of your action word, it will make the hit more dramatic. I've done lettering for western comics and some freelance manga, so I thought I might lend you this tip.
Best wishes, I always love to see original comics, eastern or western, and like I stated, you are doing a great job!
Looking forward to the next page. XD
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Trees, everyone's worst enemy XD AWESOME!! CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT PAGE!!
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yep we're doing weekly updates now, come to think of it i should make a better journal update explaining that.
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I don't get it...
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thanks, i'm glad you enjoy it so far
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This is very good. Can't wait for the next page
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thanks, im glad you enjoy it
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patience young padawon, I shall begin to upload once more soon.
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wait
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oh gosh im confused
is this something you're working on with friends?
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don't we all? it's all good though.
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I love it! ^-^ I can't wait to read more. Also thank you for the note you sent me without that I might not have found this. 
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no prob, glad you enjoy it
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Hmf... Well... Sorry if I'm being critical, but I think your manga is really hard to read from the beginning because if we don't read the summary of the story, there is first the hero who is thinking about his world and his life but nothing specific... I mean, we know he's followed by people but we don't even know why and who, if he lives in in our world, if he lives in the future...
I think the first 8 pages are useless (I was bored at the 3rd... >_>''') and it's a shame 'cause the story seems to be really interresting ! But as we don't understand the story from the first pages, we aren't really motivated to read more TxT
Otherwise, it seems that the hard work begins since he has been captured so... I want to know more >:3
(Sorry for any grammar error... English is not my native language nwn)
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yeah I'll admit that the beginning is a little dry, however that's because it's just the beginning of the story! All I was trying to do was introduce you to the main character and give you a setting to work with. Honestly how many stories do you know just start off with action on the first page and just continue that page after page after page?
I'd like to remind you of your own words " the story seems to be really interesting" and your right it is. You just have to follow it for a little bit I promise you I made sure that this story was in no way generic because I hate that myself so I wanted to be absolutely sure others would enjoy it.
you can continue to read it if you choose, or you could not(but you'd be missing out)either way though, thanks for your well thought out critique.
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It was not really what I wanted to say. =w= This is not the fact that there is no action from the start ( it would be not interresting at all -_-), it's just that the hero is talking about an organization, a woman, a war... It's ok to introduce the character but, for exemple : any manga which the story takes place in another world or something presents an initial situation like : " In 2050, a war has been declared because XXXXXX and the humans decide to create clones to XXXXXX.... " Something like that =/ I don't know if I explained it well.
What I mean is... You make readers ask too many questions and don't give enough affirmations. I don't know how to explain better than that -x-
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oh yeah dude most of that stuff will be answered in chapter 2 don't worry about it. I know there are a lot of questions to be answered and the introduction of a new character will help to do that. just be patient, we're working on it.
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hahaha chill out dude, we're working on it. gotta catch up on these colored pages.
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I know but still T_T I can already see it, im going to be looking here everyday until its out because i cant wait cuz this is so good T_T
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aaaaaaaaaaannnnnnnddd I'm hooked!
LOVE it
thank you for showing me this *puts on dev watch*
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haha, thanks im glad you enjoy it so far, be sure to check out the other artist linked in the description as well please
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Lol!! I really like it! The story seems interesting and I can't wait for the rest.
And well the only thing I can say is to be mindful of your grammar and settings and backgrounds. Backgrounds and setting really bring a story alive and as a manga you have the power to make the story awesome by actually painting the picture. It really helps and gives readers an idea as to where the character maybe and why he/she is there in the first place. And I mean every little thing count to make the story believable.
But other than that, AWESOME STORY!!
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sorry, im pretty bad at backgrounds.
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Gah! Yes grammar! I know, I know! and I'll be sure to make a note of these backgrounds that of which you speak.
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Lol! Don't worry! The manga is great already! 
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This is getting interesting
Thanks for your hard work~~~
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Nii~iiiice job! The setting is developed just just enough to be interesting, but not so much that it ruins the reader's curiousity or feels like an info-dump. Can't wait for more!
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we're working on it.
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I like it! It's not something I've seen before, and you've got me craving for more. Good job, I'd say you're on your way.
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why thank you madam, im glad you enjoy it
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No thank you for contating me about it other wise I would have never read your wonderful work.
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