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InsertDeviantName — Lust Poem
Published: 2008-07-10 22:13:41 +0000 UTC; Views: 357; Favourites: 6; Downloads: 4
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Description Lust!

Beautiful... totally invoked by your seductiveness,
Channeling all my time, craving for you...,
Hunger was kicked in from when we first met,
My appitite for you is in overdrive,
I must feel you, hold you in my hands...,
This undoubtable feeling, such love...,
Almost like cupid has send a magic arrow for us,
Finally I can see you close, lunging my hands towards you,
Holding you... grasping what I was waiting for all this time,
Smelling you... changing you... holding you so comfortably,
Glaring at you, not moving a single inch till the time is right,
I can feel it kicking in... I must move...,
Take this moment with both hands and embrace it... forever..,
The overpowering flavor from your cheese mixed with the peppers...,
Simply irresistible, the ham was totally in text to what it should be,
The flavors taking control in their own way...,
All at once... the afterblow of the aroma taking effect,
Aftertaste leaking in, so heavenly... so suttle so fragrant...,
I love you my burger and this is how much I love you,
Just to dedicate this complexing poem about yours truely!
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Comments: 15

No-Reason-At-All [2009-01-01 07:28:34 +0000 UTC]

Well that was a fun read
I kind of suspecting something like this at "My appetite for you is in overdrive" but the line "Almost like cupid has send a magic arrow for us" made me think twice

Ham and peppers on your burger? Or is that just artistic license

I think you last line was the weakest part, personally I would have ended it with something more akin to the first half of the poem, kind of bring the whole thing full circle. I do love these kind of reversals though, fightclub, or sixth sense but funny

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tetemeko [2008-07-12 22:55:33 +0000 UTC]

D:
I choked on my soda.

Terrific job. I loved it.

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InsertDeviantName In reply to tetemeko [2008-07-12 22:56:35 +0000 UTC]

Thank you lol

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edctpsu [2008-07-11 15:20:11 +0000 UTC]

wow. a great one! it made me hungry

- advice: you should join some poetry clubs from DA. people should see your deviations more!

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InsertDeviantName In reply to edctpsu [2008-07-12 11:20:18 +0000 UTC]

I joined poetryplease quite some time ago, but I don't really have the time or the mind set at the moment.

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edctpsu In reply to InsertDeviantName [2008-07-12 11:26:10 +0000 UTC]

well.. really hope you'll smile and be happy soon..

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InsertDeviantName In reply to edctpsu [2008-07-12 11:28:17 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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InsertDeviantName In reply to edctpsu [2008-07-11 15:21:39 +0000 UTC]

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rainforest-hippie [2008-07-11 02:06:33 +0000 UTC]

This is rather humorous, I like how it slowly shifts into the real thing you're describing. (although I have to disagree about loving hamburgers--I'm vegetarian)

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InsertDeviantName In reply to rainforest-hippie [2008-07-11 10:43:46 +0000 UTC]

Vegiburgers then, just change it to peas and carrots

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yumi08uchiha [2008-07-11 01:37:14 +0000 UTC]

LOL you totally had me fooled at the beginning!

But, yes, burgers are amazing = D

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InsertDeviantName In reply to yumi08uchiha [2008-07-11 01:41:34 +0000 UTC]

!

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crimsoncladvampire [2008-07-10 22:57:23 +0000 UTC]

You're in love

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InsertDeviantName In reply to crimsoncladvampire [2008-07-10 23:03:14 +0000 UTC]

YES, YES I AM!

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Ludifer [2008-07-10 22:55:29 +0000 UTC]

>< Hahah that was great! Good to see a bit of comedy on poems

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