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Published: 2008-07-11 23:31:23 +0000 UTC; Views: 188; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 1
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PropoundBeautiful... totally enchanting,
The colours... so loving and inviting,
Just sitting there faineantly... alone,
Such arcanum... why don't you move, why don't you show the world their beauty?
Are you worried for the upbraid that you may recieve?
There will be no reason to caterwaul, you will be loved!
You will be indelible, you will never be out of the light,
Being the constant focus of raillery, no one shall look as good as you,
Floating through all expectations,
This is your time, your dying hour... your wave of fame...,
I will show you the right way in your performance,
As your manager I will take great care of you...,
So please... SIGN HERE!
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I'd say that the rather unusual words already make this poem more unique and standing appart from the others. If I understood correctly the twist at the end is that of a manager (real one this time) being mentioned when at first you'd think the person was talking to a girl or such?
I like how it gives you time to think about it again. go back to considering it, rereading after you've finished with a new perspective of what the poem is about. Maybe a little observation, that in some places the words don't flow as easily as in others. Mind, that could be also with the 'advanced vocabulary' making it sound so foreign and the like. Good work on it though. It gets you going back!
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At the start I planned on making a different type of poem, but with the groove going in one way I changed it. I wanted it to be as if the manager was infact trying to convince one of his models for examplle, that she was infact beautiful and there was no need to be scared about anything throughout her career. With the added bonus at the end, telling her to sign here as if he was just telling her what she wanted to hear so he can make more money.
Thank you for the great comment!
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example* wow type
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Nice...I like to think I have a pretty advanced vocabulary, but some of these I've never heard...I need a dictionary!
Okay, now that I know the words, I shall read it again
This poem is very fluid; I think it's the word choice, but I don't exactly know--I'll just hope you know what I'm trying to say.
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Thanks alot, I understand what you mean^^. Well you learn new things each day, and for you it was some new words for your vocabulary
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