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Published: 2008-01-28 03:42:01 +0000 UTC; Views: 1602; Favourites: 28; Downloads: 64
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My thanks goes out to for her permission to use her photo "This is the First Time." I encourage all to have a look at the original [link] as well as her wonderful gallery.
Critique is welcomeI have this exact poem with a different background and am looking for feedback as to which background works better with the poem.. you can find Simple and True 2 here: [link] (in collaboration with ~ashleighjessica
So simple and true
the beauty lies within you.
Fearless and flawless
my eyes are glued to you.
So complete and sound
our bodies are bound.
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Comments: 21
the background and the poem seem to complete each other.
faved.
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I like the poem and background. They really go well together. The words have a nice flow to them when said out loud.
-Ark
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Nice work, I like the way it flows. Works well with the picture
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Lovely poem here! The words flow well, and even though it is short, it captures the feeling portrayed in the image you used.
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Technically, it is very good. It seemed rather simplistic. I don't really feel the emotions connected to this piece. It seemed like you tried quite hard instead of letting if flow. It rhymes and makes sense but there is very little deeper meaning in this.
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I really like the poem you added to this, it's heartfelt and true, and really goes with the borrowed photo.
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I see your quote is from Nikki Sixx.. have you read his book The Heroin Diaries?
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I've read parts of it yes... I still haven't scraped up enough money to go buy it, sadly. I've been trying to find a job lol.
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I hear ya, it is quite expensive... make trips to the library and sit in there and read it..
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Aye 'tis a good wee rhyme.
It does, it does, it does flow very well. - Well in my head anyways. & it's nice and simple for idiots like moi. 
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I really like this one. The passion in your lyrics is "boosted" by the pic you chose...
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The words flow well here. Great photo choice, also. The two make a great combination. The piece gives an overall sense of idealism. Nicely done.
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Very good pair between the two pieces. Great emotions all around, leaves me feeling happy for whoever the poem refers to.
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I love the expression on his face you can see in the mirror. Well done with this.
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Thanks - but the picture wasn't taken by me lol
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