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Published: 2018-12-16 22:24:58 +0000 UTC; Views: 374; Favourites: 22; Downloads: 0
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Description the sky presses down on me, cold yet comforting.
i don't mind it.
the green is kind of dull now;
winter wrapped up the brighter hues
to put under the tree.
snowflakes fall, but usually not till january.
still, when the wind wraps itself around me for warmth,
i let it, because i know
what it's like to be cold.
my mother tells me that wearing mittens
will keep my fingers from freezing,
but i tell her my fingers hate feeling trapped.
she understands.
at the end of the day, the sky blazes
as if this may be the last time it ever will.
some things were not made to be subtle.
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Comments: 6

PoetsHand [2018-12-23 17:15:51 +0000 UTC]

I really like this. I can even relate to these lines:

my mother tells me that wearing mittens
will keep my fingers from freezing,
but i tell her my fingers hate feeling trapped.

So many memories and feelings come to me in this poem!

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inthespacebetween In reply to PoetsHand [2018-12-25 04:28:50 +0000 UTC]

glad to hear it!! thank you so much <3

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Joesmo25 [2018-12-18 17:45:17 +0000 UTC]

ha, I never thought about the cold wind wrapping around us to stay warm.  That's a great visual!  I really get the sense of a spacious, bucolic setting.    

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inthespacebetween In reply to Joesmo25 [2018-12-20 23:39:12 +0000 UTC]

thank u so much!

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gliitchlord [2018-12-17 19:46:21 +0000 UTC]

this has such strong scenes

i might recommend giving it some room to breathe with spacing (?) to emphasize the impact of your lines
but that is a stylistic choice and just yknow opinion

i dig it!

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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave [2018-12-17 00:30:59 +0000 UTC]

The wind, the friend that whispers on our ear...

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