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Invader-Nie — You were mine...
Published: 2005-04-04 01:38:22 +0000 UTC; Views: 25; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 1
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Description Whisper what you mean as your hand grazes mine,
close my eyes and listen as we both chase time.
One more day gone away as I still wish you were mine,
slowly look away as I feel like I've lost my mind.

Feeling this as you know you feel the same.
Every single memory of you and me.

Our feelings will never change,
I know you feel the same,
no metter how much time will change,
I know that you will be mine.
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Comments: 4

the-beastie [2005-04-05 17:10:26 +0000 UTC]

Nice structure and rhyming throughout, the flow is kept up very well and I didn't find myself getting lost anywhere. Interesting concept and theme. Thanks for sharing, I enjoyed reading this.

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Invader-Nie In reply to the-beastie [2005-04-05 17:11:46 +0000 UTC]

Oh, why thank you! Are you sure though? It only took me a few seconds to write and it sure wasn't so hard to write... but thanks for the comment!

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the-beastie In reply to Invader-Nie [2005-04-05 17:14:10 +0000 UTC]

Hehe yes quite sure It's a good thing that it wasn't hard to write - just means that it was very natural, which is always important in poetry.

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Invader-Nie In reply to the-beastie [2005-04-05 17:21:56 +0000 UTC]

As I see it, the poetry can either just be written or it can be felt. The words you write down in poetry are something to be importance to someone. Weither it's a love poem, a heart-broken poem or just a poem expressing the outside.
It has to be something that you feel. If you just write down something you think it won't be the same, you won't have the beautiful flow to the words, the meanings of the poetry not to mention it will be harder to like when you think about every single word.

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