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IsolationRow โ€” Cheater
Published: 2011-03-04 10:39:57 +0000 UTC; Views: 270; Favourites: 8; Downloads: 2
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Description I stripped off slowly and stepped inside
Found the glass walls of the house of lies
The terrors reflected on every wall
The wicked dancing in a great hall
I wandered around and felt no fear
Nobody would touch me here
Deep inside my personal hell
Where the fallen come with goods to sell
Here I was, exposed and bare
No one to look, no one to care
I stepped outside and stayed unclothed
To expel the demons that I loathed
I walked the streets both night and day
Whether the sky were blue or grey
I spoke to others of what I'd seen
Exposing the truths behind the scene
And as I spoke I felt it lift
The heavy feeling began to shift
Though condemned I felt no fear
I did not shed a single tear
Because once the truth became exposed
I felt relieved and quite composed
For now there's nothing left to hide
Now I am free to walk outside.
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Comments: 28

creaking-door [2011-03-16 15:38:11 +0000 UTC]

A very neat set of couplets. Not a perfect flow, but enjoyable to read. Naked thoughts and mental explorations. Free at last, with nothing to hide. Great stuff.

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IsolationRow In reply to creaking-door [2011-03-17 03:37:47 +0000 UTC]

Thankyou

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creaking-door In reply to IsolationRow [2011-03-17 09:17:32 +0000 UTC]

Welcomes.

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Fantasy-luver [2011-03-04 15:18:46 +0000 UTC]

This is really amazing!
What i love most about your poems is that you (unlike most poems i read) aren't scrounging for just any word that can rhyme with the word from the previous sentence. Your poetry is genuine and well-thought out.
You are really a wonderful writer. You're one of the very few authors on DA that i look forward to reading their work <3

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IsolationRow In reply to Fantasy-luver [2011-03-05 08:45:47 +0000 UTC]

Wow, thankyou so much. I'm glad you appreciate my work so much o.o

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Fantasy-luver In reply to IsolationRow [2011-03-05 15:55:49 +0000 UTC]

^^

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IsolationRow In reply to Fantasy-luver [2011-03-06 12:04:46 +0000 UTC]

:s thanks

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kaschill7 [2011-03-04 13:16:49 +0000 UTC]

wow! in my life i take it a diffrent way but still i love it

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IsolationRow In reply to kaschill7 [2011-03-04 13:19:00 +0000 UTC]

This is not autobiographical by any means. I was trying to put myself in someone elseโ€™s position. I have never been unfaithful, but I have been on the receiving end of the unfaithfulness.

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kaschill7 In reply to IsolationRow [2011-03-04 13:22:46 +0000 UTC]

no i meant the poem could have other meanings

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IsolationRow In reply to kaschill7 [2011-03-04 13:24:50 +0000 UTC]

Oh! I see what you mean. Well, it's there for you to interpret however you please. That's what the audience is for

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kaschill7 In reply to IsolationRow [2011-03-04 13:26:24 +0000 UTC]

so true i find its always fun to see how ppl interpret things especially when they think somtyhin difrent

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IsolationRow In reply to kaschill7 [2011-03-04 13:27:50 +0000 UTC]

I do enjoy it. It is interesting to see your own words from someone else's point of view.

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kaschill7 In reply to IsolationRow [2011-03-04 13:31:45 +0000 UTC]

definately its like wow i never even thought of that like an eye opener i always like feeling like ive just gotten a wider view of the world

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Gregdw [2011-03-04 10:48:08 +0000 UTC]

I liked this very much, the abab structure was very good. I didn't notice it at first.

Very good, eyegasmic I dare say.

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IsolationRow In reply to Gregdw [2011-03-04 10:50:12 +0000 UTC]

I didn't know I did that >.>

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Gregdw In reply to IsolationRow [2011-03-04 10:55:35 +0000 UTC]

Talent at its best when you are unaware of what you had done.

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IsolationRow In reply to Gregdw [2011-03-04 10:58:31 +0000 UTC]

I must be really talented, I don't know what I'm doing most of the time

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Gregdw In reply to IsolationRow [2011-03-04 11:07:26 +0000 UTC]

I think you just found the secret to success.

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IsolationRow In reply to Gregdw [2011-03-04 11:11:13 +0000 UTC]

I'm excited. The opportunities are endless so long as I remain useless

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Gregdw In reply to IsolationRow [2011-03-04 11:12:46 +0000 UTC]

Yes! I think you may have even found out how to prevail in life. You are a genius.

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IsolationRow In reply to Gregdw [2011-03-04 11:14:29 +0000 UTC]

I really am.

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Gregdw In reply to IsolationRow [2011-03-04 11:18:49 +0000 UTC]

Woah, woah, woah, conceitedness in moderation, or you'll jinx yourself.

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IsolationRow In reply to Gregdw [2011-03-04 11:26:02 +0000 UTC]

I use it to hide my overwhelming feeling of self loathing...

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Gregdw In reply to IsolationRow [2011-03-04 11:28:29 +0000 UTC]

What a coincidence! I use my overwhelming feeling of self loathing to cover up my confidence in my work! We are two peas in a pod fer sure.

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IsolationRow In reply to Gregdw [2011-03-04 11:31:37 +0000 UTC]

I have a feeling we shall become good friends.

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Gregdw In reply to IsolationRow [2011-03-04 11:37:33 +0000 UTC]

I hope so. I have few good friends on here seeing as how I just happened upon this this week. I'm just posting all the work I've done over the years.

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IsolationRow In reply to Gregdw [2011-03-04 11:40:36 +0000 UTC]

I've only just started writing again recently after 2 or so years of writers block. It's lovely.

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