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One hundred and nineteen years later…Five dark, chilly days into November and as many since they’d come and burned Feathers, Wesley woke abruptly in the middle of the night to find his deceased pet perched on the windowsill beside his bed, watching him.
He didn’t need the bitter clutch of the icy air to tell him he wasn’t dreaming. The clock had gone seventeen soft ticks past five-eleven in the morning and it was still dark in his tiny room, but the scene was as real as the nightmares that patrolled the streets and as stark as innocence lost.
Wesley hadn’t been able to protect him.
“No animals,” one of the rough men in dark cloaks reminded harshly during the troop’s nightly search of the village. He grabbed Feathers and held him carelessly upside-down by one lean leg, the bird’s distressed squawks jarring in the horrified silence of the kitchen. Wesley opened his mouth to protest, but his mother’s fingers dug into his shoulder. Morgan Wallace was stronger than she looked, the young, pretty face and soft red curls that framed it hiding a woman who did anything necessary to protect her fatherless son.
“We’re very sorry,” she said. “It won’t happen again.”
“If it does,” the man told her dispassionately, “both of you die.” Still gripping the struggling Feathers, he strode outside, tossed the bird carelessly to the ground, and shot off a bolt of green light. Feathers burst into flames.
It wasn’t the ashes scattered by the wet autumn wind that brought stinging tears to Wesley’s cheeks, though. It was hearing his mother thank them for their mercy.
By the time he looked back to the window, his pet had disappeared. Crawling across his bed to peer out over the yard, he saw that Feathers was standing calmly on the same spot where he’d died.
“Feathers?” Wesley whispered. “Is that you?” Somehow, he knew it was, even though his pet looked remarkably different now.
“You’re more like a Fireworks,” Wesley decided, awed. “Do you want me to follow you?”
The bird was looking up at Wesley expectantly, glowing softly amidst the dying leaves that blanketed the ground. Just beyond him, the forest took over, dark and silent, wrapping around the village like a shroud. Weak moonlight filtered down through the trees, but Feathers was the brightest thing in the yard.
Quickly and quietly, Wesley gathered his warm clothing and crept down the stairs towards the door, hoping to avoid any late patrols - being caught out after curfew would be deadly.
It had been over a century ago, his mother said. The Dark King had risen. People had tried to stop him, but he’d only returned, stronger than ever.
Why can’t anybody stop him? Wesley had asked.
Because the magic-workers died. They hid the last of their magic in a wizards’ school, and then they died and the school disappeared, and the only magic left now is the evil kind that the Dark King teaches his supporters.
What if someone found the school and found the magic again?
Perhaps someday someone would. Until then, she said, it was safer to be patient and to accept things the way they were - food rationing, nightly searches, and countless laws to obey on pain of death. It was a crushing, colorless, hopeless life, but it was better than no life at all. And until Feathers, he had accepted that she was right.
Wesley’s boots crunched loudly in the silence of the forest. It was quiet and still, almost unnaturally so, and he followed without speaking for what felt like it should have been an eternity but passed with the bewildering swiftness of a dream. And then, fit to shame the wildest of dreams, the castle appeared.
It was ancient, like a forgotten monument of living memory. Its weathered stones crumbled in magnificent ruin, succumbing to decline with the dignity of a dying king. A dark lake curled beside it, the shore unnaturally silent across a soft carpet of withered grass, and the preternatural stillness of the air made Wesley feel as though he were stepping into another time, the misty dawn of a civilization where the world breathed magic, fairy tales walked the streets, and pagan wizards lifted their arms towards a younger sky. He was looking at the waste of what had been a golden age.
Hesitantly, he approached the great double doors, one of which was smashed and hanging feebly from its hinges. Stepping through, he discovered the wreckage of an enormous entrance hall, ghosts of its former beauty visible in the swooping arches of the distant ceiling and the elegant shreds of drapery fluttering like specters in the silent air. Open doorways gaped like wounds from either side of the hall, and in one corner stood four enormous hourglasses, all smashed open, bright gemstones spilling out to pool together in the dust like lost stars.
Across from the entrance was a majestic marble staircase, rising proudly from the rubble and up into the darkness, as though inviting him to explore the mysteries that lay beyond.
At the top Wesley found a corridor, and Feathers led him down it, lighting the dim pathway and guiding his wide-eyed companion through a series of hallways and rooms, closer and closer to the heart of the castle. Here, the damage was even more severe: doors were torn completely off their hinges and blocks of the surrounding stone lay on the ground as though blasted there. Soot stained the walls like blood, and fragments of statues and burned tapestries littered Wesley’s path.
At last, he found himself standing before the blackened form of a stone gargoyle that leered down at him with eager eyes. Behind it was the outline of a door, the only part of the wall that had remained unmarked by the furious destruction around it, but Wesley could see no handle or hinges. Feathers was perched on the ground now, in front of the gargoyle, and Wesley knelt down to examine the pedestal illuminated by the bird’s glow. The stone was stained dark, but the words etched into it were clear: Within lies the one thing they could not take from us, hope, waiting for the pure of heart. Below it were four short lines.
The secret lies
Within the verse:
A cure for all
A prince’s curse
Whatever the secret was, Wesley realized, Feathers wanted him to find it - the Something hidden in this forgotten castle at the heart of the forest, waiting for the right Somebody to solve the riddle that kept it safe. Feathers seemed to think Wesley was that Somebody, but Wesley wasn’t so sure. To him, the cure for all ills was chocolate, because that was what his mother always said. And the only cursed prince he knew was the frog from the story she’d told him.
“But,” he whispered to Feathers, “what kind of a password is ‘chocolate frog’?”
The gargoyle rumbled aside, and the door opened.
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Comments: 237
aryl5 [2010-08-16 03:59:59 +0000 UTC]
Beautiful. I love the whole concept, and the enchanting prose. Write more!
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queroro [2009-08-06 10:00:41 +0000 UTC]
wa~~ I just re-read it again. (how many times already?)
and you still give me goosebumps. seriously. I really like how you describe the ruins of the castle.
I really like everything about this piece.
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JaneRobin In reply to queroro [2009-08-08 00:06:09 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much; I’m really happy that you like it! Describing the ruins of the castle was one of my favorite parts to write.
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queroro In reply to JaneRobin [2009-08-08 14:21:45 +0000 UTC]
reading this was the final push that got me convinced to own all the HP books. lol
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AnnalesseLasika [2009-07-18 14:36:28 +0000 UTC]
is feathers fawkes? lol..
or is he a phoenix? <.< i might be reading to much into it.. but i was wondering.
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JaneRobin In reply to AnnalesseLasika [2009-07-18 18:00:21 +0000 UTC]
No, you’re not reading too much into it - I almost always try to hide clues like that in stories. You’re right; I definitely meant to heavily imply that Feathers might be Fawkes.
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AnnalesseLasika In reply to JaneRobin [2009-07-19 03:18:23 +0000 UTC]
haha thats awesome! I didn't actualy pick up on it untill i showed my friend the story [we are both massive harry potter fans] and then she was like "is feathers fawkes?" and i was like "ah! thats genious!" and asked.
you're amazing.
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JaneRobin In reply to AnnalesseLasika [2009-07-19 08:10:52 +0000 UTC]
Thank you; I’m so glad you enjoyed it! It was a lot of fun to write.
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AnnalesseLasika In reply to JaneRobin [2009-07-19 10:56:57 +0000 UTC]
haha well, its a really amazingly well written piece, unlike the real epilogue. This keeps the same dark, depressing tinge that all the harry potter books have, where as the real one is just very happy, and unsatisfying.. with really ridiculous names! hahaha. Writing is great fun..
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PureLoveSky1 [2009-05-04 22:31:53 +0000 UTC]
holy crap what happens next!!???
I gotta know
you gotta write it
seriously
this is amazing XDDD
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JaneRobin In reply to PureLoveSky1 [2009-05-19 07:23:36 +0000 UTC]
First of all, sorry to be so slow replying! I’ve been really busy lately and got behind on everything; I’m just catching up now.
What happens next in this is up to the reader’s imagination - I wanted to leave it open-ended so that everyone could imagine whatever they wanted. I’m really glad you liked it!
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PureLoveSky1 In reply to JaneRobin [2009-05-19 23:48:14 +0000 UTC]
nah its cool XD
my imagination huh?
T_T darn it...
JK
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puff222001 [2009-02-04 02:17:33 +0000 UTC]
Is there any more? I want to read it! I like Wesley and the story is much different from almost everything else.
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JaneRobin In reply to puff222001 [2009-02-05 07:49:18 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much; I’m glad you liked it! There isn’t more of this particular one, but I write other stuff.
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Kiaka5 [2008-11-01 18:55:23 +0000 UTC]
Wow. I really can't think of anything to say, but it's really great. I love the futureness. Is he related to one of the trio?
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JaneRobin In reply to Kiaka5 [2008-11-17 10:18:27 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much! And I’m sorry to take so ridiculously long to reply; I’ve been really busy.
In my imagination, he’s probably descended from one of the Weasleys, though it’s also up to whatever the reader wants to imagine.
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redvelvetroses [2008-10-22 08:43:39 +0000 UTC]
*gasps and makes speachless noises*
heh
that was friggen awesome. ^^ much better than the crappy epilogue thing that Rowling wrote.
many handshakes and hi5's i send.
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JaneRobin In reply to redvelvetroses [2008-11-17 10:16:15 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much! And I’m so sorry to take such a ridiculously long time to reply; I’ve been really busy. I’m glad you liked it!
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redvelvetroses In reply to JaneRobin [2008-11-18 15:26:26 +0000 UTC]
its okay! and you really deserve it!! you are really talented! you should write more... have you ever thought of writing something and actually publishing? i think you could really go far..
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JaneRobin In reply to redvelvetroses [2008-11-19 21:45:46 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! I do like to write original fiction, too; actually, I’ve been planning to put some up for a while and haven’t gotten around to it yet. XD Right now I’m doing National Novel Writing Month, which is very hectic but a lot of fun.
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redvelvetroses In reply to JaneRobin [2008-11-30 01:42:30 +0000 UTC]
thats so cool! you should post it up when you have time, from what i have read by you, i really like your style.
Also, if you have the time, it would be really cool if you could critique some of my writing.. =]
So whats the National Novel Writing Month? how its going?
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JaneRobin In reply to redvelvetroses [2008-12-05 07:56:41 +0000 UTC]
I think now that I’m almost on winter break, I’ll finally finally finally have time to put up a piece of original fiction. And once I get that space of free time, I would also be more than happy to go look at some of your writing.
National Novel Writing Month… is the reason that it has taken me a week to reply to you, because it ended Sunday night, and it has taken me since then to recover and catch up with schoolwork. XD It’s a challenge where you try to write a 50,000 word novel in a month; I just barely finished. I’m thinking that some of the original fiction I’m going to put up might be snippets from what I wrote for it, once I pick them out and edit them.
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redvelvetroses In reply to JaneRobin [2009-01-07 14:10:07 +0000 UTC]
that;'d be cool! i hope to read some more of your stuff, as i have said time and time again, you are an amazing writer ^_^
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JaneRobin In reply to redvelvetroses [2009-01-08 05:40:46 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! I have a couple things up now - nothing long, but a little bit of what I was working on for NaNo.
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dragonack27 [2008-09-10 00:30:42 +0000 UTC]
Beautifully done, it makes me want to go read the books all over again. I love the usage of words, it just ties everything together so well... congrats on winning! Now I can see why!
I find myself almost wishing that you were the one that wrote the books! XD
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JaneRobin In reply to dragonack27 [2008-09-10 03:39:49 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much! I had a lot of fun writing it.
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dragonack27 In reply to JaneRobin [2008-09-10 19:54:48 +0000 UTC]
I'm sure you did, I would too if I could write that well XD
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hananadragon [2008-09-07 00:53:05 +0000 UTC]
"Remember December my one black hen,
lay eggs of gold but who knows when,
who knows how and who knows why,
everyone is going to die..."
~The Old Country (a book) by Mordicai Gerstein...
O.o
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JaneRobin In reply to hananadragon [2008-09-07 06:34:37 +0000 UTC]
Whoa, that’s really cool! The poem I took the title from is the “Remember, remember the Fifth of November” one about Guy Fawkes, but that one’s really interesting too!
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Anjenova [2008-09-06 19:48:53 +0000 UTC]
This is so well written, thanks for the enjoyable read!
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skiptown-slowdown [2008-09-06 02:41:07 +0000 UTC]
LOVE the end. Love the image that you create; it sets the mood perfectly! And of course, the ending (even though it didn't really "end") was really clever. Good job!
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JaneRobin In reply to skiptown-slowdown [2008-09-06 04:20:32 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much!
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skiptown-slowdown In reply to JaneRobin [2008-09-06 05:42:32 +0000 UTC]
Did you, by chance, take the title from "Remember, remember, the fifth of November"...? You know, V for Vendetta?
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JaneRobin In reply to skiptown-slowdown [2008-09-06 11:15:42 +0000 UTC]
In a sense - that rhyme is very old; it refers to Guy Fawkes day. I assume that the people who made V for Vendetta used it because V is a vigilante sort of like Guy Fawkes (though I haven’t read the comic or seen the movie, so I don’t know for sure XD), and I used it because Feathers the phoenix is supposed to maybe be Fawkes.
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skiptown-slowdown In reply to JaneRobin [2008-09-07 04:06:21 +0000 UTC]
Well, the whole thing is directly related to Guy Fawkes. It's a really good movie, thought I haven't read the comic either.
That's really cool! Interesting... intertextuality? My English teacher would call it that
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JaneRobin In reply to xo-eternal-snow-ox [2008-09-06 00:41:29 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! I’m not planning to continue this particular story, since it’s supposed to be open-ended, but I do plan to write other stuff.
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xo-eternal-snow-ox In reply to JaneRobin [2008-09-06 03:13:25 +0000 UTC]
cant wait to read it ^^
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Silverbaneblood [2008-09-05 23:36:10 +0000 UTC]
This is beautifully written! And so original! Impressive. Are you going to write more??
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JaneRobin In reply to Silverbaneblood [2008-09-06 00:40:58 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! I’m not planning to write more of this particular story (I wanted to leave it open-ended), but I do plan to write other stories.
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Silverbaneblood In reply to JaneRobin [2008-09-06 01:30:36 +0000 UTC]
Bummer on leaving it open ended. But I look forward to reading more from you!
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