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Published: 2012-03-09 02:02:28 +0000 UTC; Views: 2104; Favourites: 24; Downloads: 4
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Description I sat at my desk and watch Tiffany play with Tony's hair and kiss him on the cheek. She's they girl who Tony cheated on me with. I sighed. 'Where's mystery boy when I need him?' I thought. The teacher came into the classroom and everyone went back to their seats.  I didn't pay attention all day. The only thing I could focus on was Tony and Tiffany fawning over each other all the time. I did the usual and ate lunch in the courtyard alone reading pride and prejudice. And before I knew it school was over. I honestly had no idea why I went to school anymore. I was already doing what mum and dad wanted me to do with my life. They wanted me to save the world. Just like they did.
And I will. Just because I'm told to. I sighed and sat at the bus stop. "Hey babe," said a boy as he sat down next to me. I blushed as I realised it was him mystery boy.
"It's you!" I exclaimed.
"Yeah…" He said giving me a sideways look.
"Sorry, I just-"
"What you've actually taken the time to memorize my face. Or remember me. Oh you like me don't you, I mean why wouldn't you I'm fabulously handsome. "
I sighed.  "You know you really should think about getting you head shrunk a few sizes one of these days,"
"Oh and she's got claws! I like it. What's your name anyway?" He asked as he slumped back onto the bench.
"Violet,"
"Violet what?"
"Violet Parr,"
"Nice to meet you Vi, my name is…" The boy took a moment. "Ryan,"
"Ryan?"
"Yep,"
"Ryan what?"
"Robin….aaaaaa"
"Robina?"
"YEAH!" I gave him a confused look. Did he just make that name up?
"Did you just make that up?"
"No of course not!"
"Alright…"
We sat there awkwardly for a few more moments. "Look I've been wonderin' that maybe, by some stroke of luck, you would maybe like to go on a date with me…. Maybe…"
"What?"
"I mean if you don't want to its fine, I mean I wouldn't want to force you into it but maybe you want to go get a hazelnut cappuccino… Or something,"
"I love hazelnut cappuccino's…" I said smiling.
"Then come on," Ryan stood up and held his hand out to me. I took his hand. "So where is the closest coffee place?"
"There's a really nice one just around the-"Ryan took my hand and kept on walking. I started blushing again. We walked around the corner to the coffee place.
"You sit out here and I'll get you your order," He smiled.
"But you need money," I said searching for the money in my school bag.
"No need," He said as he walked into the café. I sat outside blushing. Who the hell is this boy? I've never met anyone like him. I looked through the window and into the store. He was just so different. And how did he know I loved hazelnut cappuccino's? I would have to be really careful around this one… Suddenly a huge smash came from down the road.
"IS THERE ANYONE WHO CAN STOP THE DETINATOR!" Yelled the masked villain down the street. Dash was already there… I sighed looked at Ryan. I wrote my number down on a napkin and ran into the fight.
*
I came outside with two hazelnut cappuccinos. Vi wasn't at the table, I looked down the street and there she was with Dash smiling for the photographers as they hauled away some bad guy. I smiled to see her number on the table. I already had it, but it was nice to know that things were going well. I sighed picked up the napkin, I wrote my number on one of the cappuccinos, left it on the table and walked off back to the time machine.
*
I changed back into my normal clothes as fast as I could and came back to the table. Ryan wasn't there but there was a hazelnut cappuccino on the table waiting for me. I looked onto the cup.
'Here's my number babe xx'
I smiled when I read the cup. I instantly put the number in my phone.
This is good. A new start. And even if Ryan has a big head he doesn't seem like a bad person. But still, I couldn't trust him… I can't trust anyone…
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Comments: 27

BlueMoonScorpio [2017-04-18 22:21:28 +0000 UTC]

So why did he lie about his name?

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sparksfly04 [2013-01-20 20:58:05 +0000 UTC]

whens the next chapter cuz this gettin interesting

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LingLiJing [2012-03-11 12:25:11 +0000 UTC]

Gosh, Wilbur's "name" sounds like a soft drink or something LOL.

Your chapters look short and could use lots of filling in, but at least it's holding my attention span there

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Je5mma In reply to LingLiJing [2012-03-12 06:50:31 +0000 UTC]

Yeah I knwo I usually write them really short just to keep people's attention but usually when I first write them I blabber A LOT! So I cut it down by heaps... I've been told before that they are really short I guess I have to stop cutting them down so much...

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LingLiJing In reply to Je5mma [2012-03-12 08:32:12 +0000 UTC]

Yeah you should. Also, adding more descriptions to the atmosphere and setting will help too

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Je5mma In reply to LingLiJing [2012-03-12 08:40:00 +0000 UTC]

Ok cool. Well they are going to start going to other times and places so I'll start describing things then

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Vanilla-Fireflies [2012-03-10 00:16:50 +0000 UTC]

WOAH-SOME! I looooooooove the poster! it's amazing! I've been skimming through the comments and I was a little weirded out by Wilbur calling her 'babe' all the time but then i realised that was what you intended and then i was like 'OOOOH! right!'
And then you said he was going to change later on and the story is interesting enough already, i know this is gonna be EPIC!
CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE!

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Je5mma In reply to Vanilla-Fireflies [2012-03-10 00:40:46 +0000 UTC]

Wow! Oh my gosh. Thank you so much!
Its good to know I've got so many people looking forward to future chapter! Thank yoooooouuuu <3

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artificus [2012-03-09 09:35:33 +0000 UTC]

OH, BTW!!! I frikkin LOVE the poster!!!

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Je5mma In reply to artificus [2012-03-09 09:38:26 +0000 UTC]

Hehe thanks honey <3

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artificus [2012-03-09 09:35:03 +0000 UTC]

oh dear. sorry, but IMO Wil sounds like a complete macho here - like, the way he commands her around and calls her 'babe' all the time, that's not a very respectful way to treat a woman. and vi doesn't seem to have any self-confidence, she's only blushing all the time. didn't we learn at the end of the movie that she can be a very self-confident young woman?
anway, i guess that's a typical thing for amaricans.... so it might work out this way

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LingLiJing In reply to artificus [2012-03-11 12:23:45 +0000 UTC]

I second this sentiment. Although I'm not really sure if I should critique all out like last time with this authoress o.O

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artificus In reply to LingLiJing [2012-03-11 14:47:16 +0000 UTC]

mmh, yeaaah... she said she made him this way intentionally. it does not fit AT ALL, but when there's something behind it, maybe there is an actually reliable reason for his behaviour. we need to stay patient.

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LingLiJing In reply to artificus [2012-03-11 15:12:03 +0000 UTC]

Chapter 3 explained it it seems - so he could cover himself up.

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artificus In reply to LingLiJing [2012-03-11 15:21:33 +0000 UTC]

is it? i still didn't really get it then

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LingLiJing In reply to artificus [2012-03-12 02:17:47 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, it seemed pretty one dimensional to think that acting like a big-headed D-bag can cover himself up for a long time...

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Je5mma In reply to artificus [2012-03-09 09:38:16 +0000 UTC]

Well I intended Will to be a bit of a pig headed idiot. So I'm taking that as a compliment cause I wanted him to sound horrible.
And yeah she was confident but if you remember I mentioned Tony cheated on her and that would ruin any girs confience but she will get a bit better promise.

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artificus In reply to Je5mma [2012-03-09 11:11:55 +0000 UTC]

aaah, okay! you totally succeeded with your intention in that case i didn't say anything good job!
well, but wasn't the tony-thing already one year ago? that's a pretty long timespan to be still that much affected by it. but anyway it's your story. i'm looking forward to the next chapters.

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Je5mma In reply to artificus [2012-03-10 00:06:10 +0000 UTC]

Hehe ok cool. I'll definately be writing more!

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VioletParrNarnia [2012-03-09 09:32:36 +0000 UTC]

Nice quotes. d^_^b

I like the idea of the story. Cute.

Coincidentally, there is a name like that. my last name is RabEna

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Je5mma In reply to VioletParrNarnia [2012-03-09 09:35:00 +0000 UTC]

Hehe thanks so much <3

And really!? Thats so awesome!

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VioletParrNarnia In reply to Je5mma [2012-03-09 10:17:25 +0000 UTC]

yeah. G. Rabena


I find it awkward that he calls her babe. (unfortunately for me, I couldn't get over the title of that movie. "Babe") hehe

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Je5mma In reply to VioletParrNarnia [2012-03-09 10:19:59 +0000 UTC]

Haha cool!

And I'm trying to make him sound like a bit of a dick. He'll change soon...

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VioletParrNarnia In reply to Je5mma [2012-03-10 00:59:16 +0000 UTC]

He always does in fanfics.

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Je5mma In reply to VioletParrNarnia [2012-03-10 01:03:11 +0000 UTC]

Hehe

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Saachi1399 [2012-03-09 04:56:37 +0000 UTC]

OMG yes! chapter 2!!!! can't wait for more!

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Je5mma In reply to Saachi1399 [2012-03-09 04:57:48 +0000 UTC]

Hehe. Glad some people are following it!!!!

Thanks <3

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