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joe-wright β€” Flowers and Rain
Published: 2013-07-26 23:09:58 +0000 UTC; Views: 2746; Favourites: 106; Downloads: 4
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Description A city full of flowers. A city full of rain.

I watch over it through the gap in the crumbling brickwork. There's a little girl wandering in the street below. God knows how she got there. I can't see properly through the scope of my rifle, but it looks like she's crying.

When I see her face I remember something I haven't remembered for years. I was her age when the evacuations happened. At least they started as evacuations. The word implies that everyone was following a plan, but it was just mass panic within a few hours. Still, we call those days the evacuations, because that was the word they gave us. That's the word my parents used.

I remember I held my mother's hand all the way through the crowds. I remember the way I slipped out of her grasp on a bridge full of violent people. I remember being jostled and crushed by the rabble as I searched for them. I remember the taste of my tears.

I brush my hair away from my eyes and watch her through my sights as she picks her way up the road. Tangles of weeds mark the graves of the infected. One of the tangles moves.

It's a garland man. The girl doesn't see it, she seems to be preoccupied, looking for something. Probably someone. At least she knows enough not to call out.

Another heap of flowers twitches as she gingerly steps over it. She's going to die if I don't do something.

I listen up. The garland men are still in the building. Seven, as far as I've been able to tell. I hid in here and barricaded the door, but if something were to set them off, like, say, a gunshot, nothing would stop them crashing their way in here.

I look at my arm, and the green shoots growing in the festering cut. It itches like hell. The itching is worse than the pain. I've got seven days to live.

I watch as the little girl notices the flower-covered men following her and falls down in the street as she tries to run. My finger moves to the trigger. The garland men are at my door, one way or the other.

I've got seven days to live... or seven ways to die.

The air smells of pollen and petrichor. Full of flowers, full of rain.
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Comments: 42

Fulcrum45 [2013-09-19 01:39:03 +0000 UTC]

Haunting little story. You created quite the atmosphere in this.

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joe-wright In reply to Fulcrum45 [2013-09-19 11:07:38 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, I'm glad you think so!

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Tapunyr [2013-09-16 05:40:57 +0000 UTC]

This is by far the best piece of creative writing I've read in a long time.Β  It was clever, imaginative and moved me.Β  Β 

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joe-wright In reply to Tapunyr [2013-09-16 10:54:39 +0000 UTC]

That's a lovely compliment, thank you!

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Tapunyr In reply to joe-wright [2013-09-16 14:35:50 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.

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FreakieGeekie [2013-09-16 04:42:22 +0000 UTC]

This is amazing! You say so much in so few words yet there's enough that we know what's going on.

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joe-wright In reply to FreakieGeekie [2013-09-16 10:54:12 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

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tihssiamnae [2013-09-16 04:33:01 +0000 UTC]

Very nice!

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joe-wright In reply to tihssiamnae [2013-09-16 10:53:54 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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oviedomedina [2013-09-16 03:13:14 +0000 UTC]

This is very well done!

Almost makes one wish it was Β longer!

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joe-wright In reply to oviedomedina [2013-09-16 10:53:45 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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oviedomedina In reply to joe-wright [2013-09-16 18:18:53 +0000 UTC]

No problem!

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LeftUnfinished [2013-09-15 18:30:37 +0000 UTC]

Loved it, so creative. A wonderful transition from lyrics to story.

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joe-wright In reply to LeftUnfinished [2013-09-15 20:07:31 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!

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MissPinks [2013-09-15 18:08:47 +0000 UTC]

reminds me of the movie "the ruins"
vines and flowers that grow into your wounds under your skin. totally creepy
well this is a fair bit different though, not implying you copied or anything of course.
but you may like it, you should look it up 8D
congrats on the DD too.

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joe-wright In reply to MissPinks [2013-09-15 20:06:58 +0000 UTC]

Sounds cool, I'll look it up! thanks for reading

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ThePathOfDreams [2013-09-15 16:41:37 +0000 UTC]

This is an amazing story.... Very touching... Well done!

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joe-wright In reply to ThePathOfDreams [2013-09-15 20:07:06 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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neurotype-on-discord [2013-09-15 14:24:12 +0000 UTC]

Associating flowers with a zombie type apocalypse? I love it.

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joe-wright In reply to neurotype-on-discord [2013-09-15 14:34:49 +0000 UTC]

It's inspired by a strange festival in a village called Castleton. We used to visit every year when I was little, and the main event was when the Garland King rode through town on a horse, completely covered in flowers. It's this strange juxtaposition of pretty and creepy, I loved it
en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Castleto…

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neurotype-on-discord In reply to joe-wright [2013-09-15 15:16:15 +0000 UTC]

Whoa that is much creepier than I imagined. Awesome, thanks!

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PursuingTheCerberus [2013-09-15 13:35:05 +0000 UTC]

wow...just, WOW!

Loved every second of it.

I sense a piece of greater length within these words!!! Excellent work.Β  Congrats on the DD!

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joe-wright In reply to PursuingTheCerberus [2013-09-15 14:20:43 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it!

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CrepuscularPetrichor [2013-09-15 13:06:00 +0000 UTC]

Yes! Somebody else knows the word "petrichor"!

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joe-wright In reply to CrepuscularPetrichor [2013-09-15 13:19:06 +0000 UTC]

It's funny really, I almost didn't use it because it seems kind of 'in vogue' at the moment, I've seen it in quite a few places recently. I liked the alliteration and the way it paired with 'pollen' to evoke a specific scent, so I used it anyway

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Lintu47 [2013-09-15 08:37:19 +0000 UTC]

    Congrats on the DD!
    Have a nice day!

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joe-wright In reply to Lintu47 [2013-09-15 12:04:44 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, you too!

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Lintu47 In reply to joe-wright [2013-09-15 13:18:51 +0000 UTC]

    My pleasure, thank you

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NamelessShe [2013-09-15 08:32:12 +0000 UTC]

What's this? Congrats on the DD!

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joe-wright In reply to NamelessShe [2013-09-15 12:05:02 +0000 UTC]

Yay, thank you!

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kitiaramajere [2013-07-30 20:42:17 +0000 UTC]

Man, how do you get so much into so few words?

Sorry, rhetorical question.Β 

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joe-wright In reply to kitiaramajere [2013-07-30 22:14:56 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! I do like this one, it came out much better than I expected!

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NamelessShe [2013-07-28 01:46:40 +0000 UTC]

Such a scary idea, and wonderfully executed. I love it!

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joe-wright In reply to NamelessShe [2013-07-28 10:28:53 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! I'm glad it was scary
I actually think the senses challenge helped me write better in this case

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Wolfrug [2013-07-27 13:02:13 +0000 UTC]

Aw man. This was very nice. Although I haven't played it (NO SPOILERS), seems a little The Last of Us inspired? Either way, well done.

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joe-wright In reply to Wolfrug [2013-07-27 19:08:31 +0000 UTC]

It's a sequel to one I did two weeks back, which did have a little bit of the Last of Us in it yeah

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The-Inkling [2013-07-27 10:00:26 +0000 UTC]

More garland men! I really liked this, lots of pathos. Also PETRICHOR.

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joe-wright In reply to The-Inkling [2013-07-27 19:09:20 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! They've dragged me through two nasty ass challenges now, god knows how

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The-Inkling In reply to joe-wright [2013-09-15 07:08:42 +0000 UTC]

A DD, well done!

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joe-wright In reply to The-Inkling [2013-09-15 12:03:55 +0000 UTC]

Wow! My day has been considerably improved

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IntelligentZombie [2013-07-27 02:33:59 +0000 UTC]

Oh, this is so sad and beautiful. I think this is my new favorite of your stories I've read.Β  Β 

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joe-wright In reply to IntelligentZombie [2013-07-27 19:09:38 +0000 UTC]

Aww thank you! that's good to hear

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