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JosyHozi830 — Resurfacing in a New Life CH-2 PG-32
Published: 2014-10-09 04:04:28 +0000 UTC; Views: 1599; Favourites: 17; Downloads: 1
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-OMG! Entonces nos haremos súper héroes!? Protegiendo la ciudad con disfraces geniales!?
-Enserio, que te pasa?
-No tienes imaginación
-Es tarde... chicos deberían ir a casa
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Son tan lindos!!!!! 
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Yay another page! :3
Also, Josy do you want me to correct some of your mistakes, or at you fine with how it is? (I can understand it, it's just that it sounds a little wierd. ^^')
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I would really like to! I know that I need a lot of help, so YES PLEASE!
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Um okay, so I would change Mikey's saying in the second panel to:
"You have no imagination." There's nothing wrong grammatically, it's just not a common phrase, so it sounds out of place.
Also, April's last statement seems a little...well flat and forceful. And by that I mean she has the same tone as: "Blade, go home, you're drunk." In my serious voice. (I have no idea if this is making any sense. x.x)
Anyway, I would change it to a suggestion that she is giving them, after all she can't really force them to do anything.
So I would change the "Go home." into:
"You guys/all should go home."
Please tell me if this was informative, and if not what I could do in better explaining myself. ;v;
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Whoa... I love how you explain.... *u*
I'm changing it! Thank you!
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