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Published: 2002-06-07 01:25:03 +0000 UTC; Views: 272; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 14
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Feeding the Wilding Butterbeesby jsenn
It's been awhile since you last saw me
feed the wilding butterbees
or ask what hence behind this fence
or sing the music of honey sweet Z's.
Once, I remember
after long, long winter winds did blue
I heard a lonely, sad, sad song
it wasn't me or you flie shoo
I guess it was the winded moon.
Oh, I don't know,
I think, perhaps it was really, time
ringing chimes as it rolled along
and the sound was chirping crickledlees
singing up high in the tallowwine trees
joined in low by the hummingfleud
humming humms for me and you.
It's always been a joy-us time
climbing up and down this life
we still enjoy play'n time
noon and nightime, teatime...anytime!
(could'a done without those damn sucking limes)
other than that, babe, it's been sublime.
Joy Senn
6/4/2002
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i simply adore your rhyming... you put me to shame lol! nevertheless you're Joy, you should... lol jk...
you're amazing.
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the exchange.. the rememberance... the 'crickledlees' okay.. the 'sucking limes' part is definitely a smile starter.
creates a character voice in my head.. a monologue almost from a film.. or radio program... theatre production.. was a hoot to read it aloud.
the playfullness with the language is lovely.
you are quite wizardly in the way you enchant.
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it's one of those poems i don't try to understand but just enjoy. the difference is as standing outside a glass globe with tumbling butterflies when you shake it, or standing within that world and belonging to it completely and joyously without needing to know why.
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methinks you've been reading pachunka too much or maybe listening to the mispellings of kalimon for too long... i don't know... it's very different...that's for sure...
//spunj13
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Only 15 comments for this masterpiece! I think this is one of my favorite works that you have done to date Joy, +Faves to be sure.
"...It's always been a joy-us time..." I love the play on words in this line. It is so you! hahahaha Amazing work, and I like the double line spacing, keep that for sure. Bravo *applauds*
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I love the rhythm change there towards the end. ::stands in amusement:: Yup, babay, it's all sublime! hehehehe That's a nifty little word. Just thought of something... I love words! I'm in love with words! Awww hehehe they are the quite of cuteness little things aren't they!?! I'm not really this weird... words are just like a little drug for me. Yup, I get high off of words! Oh, and joy, just to letcha know, I've enjoyed getting high off yer werds! hehehehe!
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°Si Ud nota algún uso de gramática
incorrecto o errores de escritura de mi español o inglés, por favor avíseme.
°If you notice any incorrect grammar usage or misspellings in any of my Spanish or English, please let me know.
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Well I do not read too much poetry these days, but every time I have returned to your page to view your most recent work, I end up with squinted eyes and an unusual smirk. You refine your craft more and more, and in fact, I cannot tell whether you have spent time in arduous revision or if this was composed while you drank some green tea. Quite the compliment - if all goes as planned. But additionally, here, you seem to have taken every facet of Joy Senn's poetic style and offered its sum on one silver - or light green platter. Feast!
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Hahaha, this is wonderful! It makes me want to go out and play right now! Of course, maybe this time I won't get QUITE so lost, eh?
I love it when rhyming things work, and I love it when you rhyme. Sounds like a good combination to me.
The elf's tapping his foot, I think I've got to go play after all.
Thanks for this poem, and the journal entry. It's good to be welcomed back.
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.:: ne lump or two, indeed.::.
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Unique, as expected. Wonderful!
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mmm. very sweet and beautiful, reminds me of a slightly more understandable jabgerwocky. very good, as always joy
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mastermind
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you make me smile with every word you use..... and every poem you write.....
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you truly have a voice like no other, joy.
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I divide my time as follows: half the time I sleep, the other half I dream. I never dream when I sleep, for that would be a pity, for sleeping is the highest accomplishment of genius.
Søren Kierkegaard
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reads so beautifully...the words just go tripping smoothly off your tongue
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Yes, I am weird.
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I really like the way the made up words are given definition by the way they affect the feelings portrayed around them. This seems like a springtime song when hearts soar into the warm air after being trapped below winter. I love the no regrets through all the years expression and truly envy that happiness. Beautiful and uplifting.
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Dreaming as the summer dies
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"it wasn't me or you flie shoo" - I don't really like this line very much... I'd rather it just said "it wasn't me" or maybe "it wasn't me, it wasn't you"... I don't know.
Still, this is pretty cool. "crickledlees", "tallowine trees"? hehe, cool.
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Your words never cease to cheer me up, no matter how down I maybe feeling. So thanks!
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You can only be young once, but you can be immature forever.
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Long winter days are perfect for sad songs, it seems to fit the mood sometimes. Great poem.
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*scratches his head*
I like it... but I think maybe I need to bookmark and reread after some sleep.
The words make it sound like something you would hear at the beginning of a disney movie
Maybe you could explain it to me?
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Very beautiful, as usual
It seems to be a hint, isn't it?
Fabrizio
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