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Scentsby jsenn
My hands cup my face
the scents of my day linger
orange, coffee, you.
Joy Senn
2/16/02
Comments: 39
Lovely poem, feels like a nice, lazy morning spent with a loved one.
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I do believe that scents are the strongest sense tied to memory. I like how this haiku reminds me of that. +fav
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FAVORITE I LOVE THIS POEM, OH MAN I LOVE IT, I DONT KNOW WHY BUT I .... lemmie not caps lock the whole dam thing, i honestly teared up in joy
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A cute little blast of good imagery.
I like it. Congrats on the DD.
Ube.
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I have been looking into this form of art as of late, trying to learn how to write it. This is a little bit different from what I have been reading, but is still well written.
....Although I'm not sure that you are looking for suggestions..I do agree with ~cripes idea. I have read it both ways and to me it reads somewhat cluttered with the first My ....but that's imo...
Your work remains as beautiful as it always has.
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Best one of yours yet.
My hands cup my face
the scents of my day linger
orange, coffee, you.
Consider...
Hands cup my face
the scents of my day linger
orange, coffee, you.
Just a thought.
Great piece.
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Let the snake wait under
his weed
and the writing
be of words, slow and quick, sharp
to strike, quiet to wait,
sleepless
William Carlos Williams
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Beautiful Haiku.
Isn't it always amazing how a scent can make everything else disappear and you think of that one person?!
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The way to love is to realize that it may be lost. -- Gilbert K. Chesterton
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sweet sweet thoughts. feels so comforting, relaxing to read. i love this.
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That's some high quality haiku gorwin' thar.. go dtí an max :j
I really like this.. every time y'read it something about it becomes clearer.. rockin' :j
Pach
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lovely joy.
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. rajiv .
. kwan Studios India .
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delicious! So much emotional power in the seemingly small frame of a haiku. You've given me a world in seventeen syllables. Thank you.
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All your images of winter I see against your sky. -Hafiz
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beautiful in its shortness.. and it makes me think of happy spring days - ah i wish it was spring now instead of drearyfreezingrainsleetgreytoilinmsleep. ..
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~me
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awwww!!! the words are so loud.
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=j a z z r o c k e t=
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hehe... this short but sweet poem actually filled my heart. its crazy, it brought me back to a specific day and a specific smell. that such a neat feeling... that time travel that just occured!
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Southern Chick: Country Girl, With a City Attitude
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ah joy, you just KNOW i love haikus and being succinct/concentrated with imagery. this is a wonderful piece headed straight to my favlist.
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well well well...hello again
i love haiku..the words fit perfectly, mingling with each other like so many scents of a day, wafting, drifting upon the breeze, and hey!
*inspiration knocks me on the head from behind
scents of a day, drift
sniff the sweet smells into me
like paintings on breeze...
oh well, maybe ill work on it someday..very nice joy.
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yes. yes. yes.
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Personally, I find poetry styles confining. I am impressed, however, by those who can bend their words to meet these styles. Nice work, jsenn.
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Beautiful in capturing all lapses of emotion. Your words hit home
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ooh myy yummygoooodness!! that is the sweetest haiku, Joy. sweet and lovely and romantic. afternoon, comfort, not wanting to do anything else.. just sit and and maybe daydream and let and enjoy the scents. "linger" is a perfect word, yeah? i believe it is. the last word made me smile and sigh. this is very nice, Joy. you write hailkus so well.
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When I read your words, I see a lazy afternoon. There you are sitting outside in the sun....a dish of fresh oranges and a hot fresh cup of coffee...as you write more wonderful works of art!! This work paints such a vivid picture. Once again...another work of art from the pen of Joy.
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and people criticize MY short poem? theres nothing wrong with them damnit!!!!!
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i like this, joy. it's so hard to truly capture a moment in a haiku -- that's the intriguing challenge of the form -- but i think you do it well.
and, of course, any new poem by you is a reason for elation! i want to cram them all into my mouth at once and mumble out, 'More! More!'
-- deej
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Come and read my poems, friend.
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Good poem.....shows emotion with very few words....nice !!
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UPERMAN !!
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o yum its almost like eating a jaffa, great lil poem Joy!
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Sweet,mellow, midnight jasmine in Ibeza.
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A man has to know his limitations... Speak softly and carry a big stick
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yummy. yummy. yummy.
I love your words.
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hmm, so little words yet so much meaning. nice.
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So very powerfull! You are a master wordsmith!
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sometimes the fewer the words the more poignant the message....this is quite effective...a wonderful work....
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