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Kamellion — Cogs, Cobblestones, and Conundrums
Published: 2013-06-17 18:31:12 +0000 UTC; Views: 699; Favourites: 19; Downloads: 0
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You folk think me strange,
Someone's bauble, or
The work of a mind most deranged.
Just a machine, yet another work
Of one's hands.
A vast creation of brass cogs, copper plate
and copper bands.
What fools you outsiders are!
Letting your eyes and ears tell you what is
and isn't true.
My people are different,
Barbaric and superstitious in your eyes.
While our hearts are steeped in the old ways,
It is only your actions, not your customs
That we despise.
Beneath these cold scales and metal plate,
Beats a heart long-steeped in what is right.
You do not have to believe I am more than
The beast before you
Heed my words well, newcomers
While time remains for you still.
Please, for the sake of your own loved ones
Leave off your foolishness, lest it cause your blood to spill.
Remove the saws, drills and burning stench
Those trees have done your folk no harm.
The hills have no fingers to point, nor toothsome jaws to clench.
Disturb them, and they will bring naught but great alarm.
Give the forests and mountains time to repair,
If your lives you truly cherish.
Else your paths will darken all the quicker,
Before you slowly perish.
King am I,
Of mountain, hill, meadow and valley,
Wood and orchard alike.
Remember, now, you have been warned.
Do as I ask, otherwise,
They will make the first strike.
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Comments: 35
Thanks! I was really 'in the mood' for writing poetry when I made this particular piece. 
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Thanks! Poetry like this is something that requires the proper mood, in order for me to fully commit to it, ya know?
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I know the feeling. One of my stories is like that, I can only write it if I am in the mood for it.
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I'm not into this genre. But I can tell you that this is an amazing work, full of symbolism and metaphor. You really have a gift
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Thank you very much. ^_^ This particular piece was inspired by an old roleplay involving my steampunk cyborg earth dragon, and her meeting with upper-class humans.
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Like I said, and nothing personal, just not into that stuff. The nice thing about truly good poetic prose is that the reader can interpret from it what it means to them personally, and it's all good!
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^_^ Again, thank you! I tried to portray her responses in a very dignified manner...Melrisna(the speaker) is outraged, but knows how delicate diplomatic matters can be, so she's walking a tightrope with her speech, in a sense.
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"The hills have no fingers to point, nor toothsome jaws to clench." Love it, such a clever use of words. Proper use of the word 'nor' also happens to be my favorite thing, double points for you!
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Wow. this is awesome! I really love your poetry, you have such talent in this area!!
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This is really awesome, your verse flows very well. Great imagery, I like the longer description you left in one of your comments about the story behind it too. Melrisna sounds like an intriguing character.
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Thanks! Mel's been through a lot over the years, to say the least.
As for my poetry, it's one of those talents that comes and goes in spurts. One minute I've got inspiration and feel like writing page after page...The next, absolutely nothing. :/
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Great message!
This has a strong narrative voice and it flows rather well! The imagery is vivid and your phrasing holds a style I quite like! This is a great poem, I like the turning point part way through and there are some cracking lines in there! Well done! 
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Thank you for checking out my work! Would you like a thorough explanation of it, or did you read the one I have already in the list of comments for the piece?
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Oh I didn't see that 
Please, do tell
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Alright. Here's the short version: Melrisna, the ruler of the 'Earth' kingdom, has taken it upon herself to gather her fellow rulers for a meeting to resolve the chaos erupting from the wanton destruction of the forests and mountainsides lining the northern border of her kingdom. Humans have never lived in her kingdom or the three neighboring ones for as long as anyone can remember...
Humans from the country beyond Melrisna's land saw how enormous the trees were, and found good sources of iron, copper, and all manner of other useful metals and minerals abounding near said mountains and forests. Using steam-driven machines, they set about strip-mining the land, and cutting down the forests for their own uses. Due to their size, many native creatures make forests such as this their cities and homes for the duration of their lives. By destroying them, they broke up families, and left hundreds homeless. Warnings were given, but were unheeded, due to language barriers, and the natives being considered little more than territorial beasts.
At the meeting to resolve these issues, Melrisna was thought to be some remotely controlled golem or machine, rather than a living, breathing creature. She explained to them that they were blind to only see physical features and judge others by them...Later, she lists their wrongdoings, and that if they do not cease, or try to help the forests and land heal, she and her fellow rulers will not be held responsible for what catastrophes might occur next.
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Okay. THIS. is awesome. Now I feel like reading poems all day
The human race needs this planet to survive but some - mainly those who would have the power to change things - poison their own food and destroy what they need. Without the rainforest there won't be enough air for all humans but instead of being happy that such an amazing place exists they kill it. It is natural that every now and then almost all living creatures on this planet die, it probably happened five times before, but with this destructive manner of treating our planet, it happens much more faster.
Let's be honest, yes, there are amazing things mankind has done - for example the fact that I can talk to you so far away - but the way things are now they won't last much longer. And one day the existence of humans will be forgotten and the world will still go on and there will still be life and death. Because in the end, humans stay humans and are nothing like a god.
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Thank you! Would you like for me to explain it further, or have you read the 'replies' to the poem's comments that already have said explanation?
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YAW ^^
Actually when I wrote this comment the explanation wasn't there so I'll go read it now ^^
*reads it*
Okay, that sounds absolutely awesome.
Also I think you just made my fear of longer English texts go away. Thank you.
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You're welcome. If there's ever any phrases that aren't translating easily/at all that you'd like help with, drop me a line(aka contact me), either by comment or note, and I'll clear it up for you.
As for the explanation part, Mel's people(the people in her kingdom...Not just the earth dragons) rely on magik and simple technology(Think pre-steam engines) for daily life...They don't feel the need to use machines for everything, since they are taught as children what plants and creatures to watch out for, and to use their brains a great deal more than their muscles in most situations. (Don't just kill an obstacle, find another way around/over/under it. Not to mention that manners matter a great deal to them...A polite word can mean the difference between life and death.
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Oh I see...... mmmm I easily understood it. I wonder if I should make one for someone special......
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If you like, I can explain it further...It's based somewhat on the first rp I had Melrisna in, a long time ago.
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Mmmm sure, I may understand it better then. I guessed it had something to do with humans tearing the earth apart for oil and things like that and she is like a dragon of nature.
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Not for oil, but for mining and simply clearing the land for farming and houses. They thought that she was just a machine being controlled by someone else on the inside, or from a distance. She was meeting a small group of these 'invaders' for the purpose of drawing up a peace treaty near the border between the two lands. Humans, elves, and a few dwarves were all involved in it, but they were nothing like the elves, dwarves, and other creatures of Mel's land. They didn't try to replace what had been destroyed, or even explain it, when they first met resistance to their 'cause'. At the end of the poem, she's basically telling them what the rest of her fellow rulers already know...That if they don't stop what they've been doing, she won't be responsible for the retaliation to follow.
((Btw, the rp should liven up soonish...Svivomilo hasn't let on yet that he's dead.
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Oh I see..... wow... thank you.
(Oh okay, though I'm always happy with just calm peacefulness just so you know, I hardly get bored)
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Yeah...They weren't exactly the most intelligent folks. Melrisna's people live in relative harmony with the forests and hills, eating very few 'processed' foods, save for preserved fruits, vegetables, and some pickled meats when winter comes. Each season is like, half again as long for them as our seasons are. Being the furthest to the north, the winters are horrendously difficult for even the most prepared folks to withstand, making it imperative for everyone to keep plenty of food and warm bedding on hand...Everyone who doesn't hibernate, that is.
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