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Published: 2015-12-11 10:57:19 +0000 UTC; Views: 537; Favourites: 17; Downloads: 0
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ANOTHER ATTEMPT AT CG ART Β which actually failed, I wanted to go all out on the background but instead went for a simple sky /weepsquite satisfied with the outcome tho, so I'll keep this style for a while /o/
here's my baseball-loving bby Yuuya and his trusty bat
Yuuya (c)me
Pose ref from Daiya no Ace opening but i forgot which one whOOPS
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So taking a look here, you've got a a decent looking original character. You call this character a "he" yet I can't help but wonder why he has clips in his hair. Your proportions appear to be correct and you shading isn't bad at all. The background is also very nice with the clouds.
Despite this, some of your wrinkles appear to be a bit off. Most notably that big wrinkle on his left sleeve. It looks like he's missing part of his arm underneath or something.
What I think this piece is weakest in is it lacks impact. Basically you just have a character standing there with a bat. It doesn't really have much impact, it just looks a little plain. You could easily fix this impact in multiple ways. One would be to increase the intensity of the lighting, add some motion to bat as it is being moved into place, add some manga like effects. As it is, it looks kinda plain and not really packing too much of a "Wow" factor. But again it can easily be fixed.
Overall, this is a decent first picture. It tells something about the character and the techniques you use are good. It's just that the picture needs to pack more of a "wow" factor to really make an impact.
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Ahh oh my gosh thank you so much for your helpful feedback!!
I agree with you 100% on a lot of things ahahaha I'm trying to practice more dynamic poses so this really helps a lot! Still trying to draw clothes folds properly without reference, so I have to look more on that later...
And now that you mention it, I was considering putting some blur effect on the bat but i forgot in the end whOOPS but I'll keep that in mind for next time!
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Ahh this looks great!! The clouds are so nice *A*
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aww thank you so much Q 7Q
i just played around with the brush setting so the clouds wasn't much x'D
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KEIK OMG SO NICE!!!!
I love them hands pfft
Too lazy to write a critique (and idk how to) but if I can point out just one thing : His eyes ! If he's gonna hit a ball, isn't he supposed to look at it ? Maybe if he looked a little higher it'd be a tiny bit better ? //v\\ (i say that but i also have a SUPER HARD TIME drawing they eyes looking in the right direction orz) Just saying o7o/
OK LOVE YOU BYEE
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OMG ELSCHII IT HAS BEEN SO LONG SINCE I SAW YOU
or talked to you hAHA;;;;
but amg i actually thought he's supposed to look more down-- since baseballs are meant to be thrown at the level of the batters' thigh area but ahh thank you so much for the input! I still got a long way to go, so hopefully i can improve next year ///v///
LOVE YOU TOO ELSCHI
ALSO i couldn't comment on each of ur art i missed while i was gone bUT I STILL LOVE YOUR ADORBS ART OKK BYE
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IKRR OTL
School and other stuff has been taking away all my time xDD
OOHHHH that's right !! I don't know anything about baseball hahahaha :'D I guess it depends where the ball is :'D
(in any case the eye direction might be easier to figure out if you draw the object the character is looking at (like, even just as a point, so you can draw a line between the eyes and the point and see where it's supposed to be???)
Yeah !!! >7< Soon will be the time to look at our resolutions from this year and to make new ones haha
AMG BUT -- IT'S OK I DIDN'T COMMENT ON YOURS EITHER !!!! YOU'RE TOO MUCH KEIK, TOO SWEET
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HNGG I KNOW it has been tough but hopefully school won't eat away a lot of our time anymore ;v;
asdklfjfah yes i think i should do that orzzz
i think i should start drawing objects and maybe light source so i know where to shade and where to leave light as well 8'D sometimes i just get confused with shading;;;
but thank you so much for your help elschi! it really means a lot to me <333
AMG SHHH YOU'RE THE SWEET ONE CAUSE YOU ACTUALLY COMMENTED ON THIS ONE AHHH
I GUESS WE'RE BOTH JUST BUSY ;;;V;;;
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KeiKeiiiii, you draw clothes so wellllll o|-< Dem wrinkles (AND HANDS, WHAT THE HECK, THEY'RE PERF)Β I like the shading you went with here, too! It's nice on the eyes *w* Make more art, Boba!!
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asldkjfh thANK YOU RAYRAYYY i still have long way to go but thank you huhuhu you should make more art too cause i miss em + v +Β
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You're welcome, Boba!! Keep up the awesome work! B) And omg, if I make something that isn't Undertale then I will let you know! 
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PSHH I KNOW GURL
lots of people I know are still in the Undertale hell like you but no worries, i shall wait for your art forever if i have to 8)
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Ooorrrrrrr, you could join us, Kei B)) *chants* Join us join us join ussss B))))
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