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Published: 2006-10-25 15:29:58 +0000 UTC; Views: 123; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 0
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so, i want your advice but don't be mean, this is important to me, this piece will only be up temporaly so i can get some critique and then it will come down until i am happy with itEDIT- the lack of details in intentional, this is going to be computer colored, i hope to add all the shading, wrinkles and textures at that point
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i don't know what all you've done since you placed this online i would just say the guy feels to be too boxish or like square perhaps a little bit more curve to add the more 3d look, just my opinion
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yeah his cape does that, i'm trying
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Hm. Things that strike me:
-they look very stiff. Especially the guy. Possibly due to his cloak?
-upper arms don't seem big enough. Big enough around, I mean. Same with the girl's left thigh. Could just be me though...
-the guy's head seems... too small on top? Something about it is iffy.
Even considering these things, I like it. Proportions are good, the pose is nice (not just your generic 'two people facing front') and I reeeeally like the guy's weapon. Even though you can't see it much, it's one of those speary things with a long blade that I want to call a word from Wheel of Time.
Can't wait to see the detail and colour on this.
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and ps the weapon is called a naginata sometimes, atleats that is the name i know it by
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not exactly sure how to fix the stiffness perhaps wrinkles
your advice is very useful and i have already fixed alot of thse thing on my hard copy
This will be my first computer coloring experiment (read as will probably take me a decade, unless i get alot of help)
Thankyou
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Hey I really like this. The poses are great. Your stuff gets better and better everytime I see it. I admire that you can draw more than one person in a drawing, this, I am incapable of.
This summer we will have much hanging out and playing of games.
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thank you very much, drawing more then one person is very tough but with practice i know you can do it, i'm no expert but if you want hints sometime, i'll share my meagar wisdom. As for rocky horror, it apears to not be occuring until febuary, we shall see though
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everything seems to smooth. their expressions on there face seem to be saying something different then the picture lets on. thats my critic right off the bat.
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what do you think is going on and what do you think their faces say?
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ok. first thing you should concentrate on is the faces. the noses is so round and similar. you should point them slightly and pay attention to the archs. a nose can say a lot about gender and personality (in art). a females nose will tent to pug a bit more and be smaller and even pointier, while a male nose will tend to be bonier and have a slightly more defined bridge. fight now they are basically the same...but the mans is pugged a bit more. also, lips almost Always have a concave curve to them an wil protrude from the mouth. and the chin would go back from the lips and curve back out to and extent. you can search for facial profiles to see what im talking about
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i agree with your advice, though it amuses me that someone said that the female was not rounded enough and you think her nose should be pointier hehe i like your advice better,i think the fmale needs more work then the guy since he even already has alittle bit if the chin thing you said. The problem i have with the famale is she is elven and therefore long faced, i tried to add a proper chin ot her face but it elongated it to much, i'll just have to try more. Thank you so much, Do i have any major body problems?
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for the body....well, the first thing is th girls left leg (right on the paper) the bend is awkward. she is walking farward right? the calf should not overlap the thigh. Also the feet....feet can be challenging, but it is really worth while to learn or figure out. right now she lookes like an ancient egyptian drawing the way it is sideways like that. both feeet really need some sort of line in them to give them some sort of dimension. even the one that is bent. I would also say, get some folds in the clothes. i'm just noticing the faces again...the eyes, I assume they are looking at eachother, but the eyes reallt arent....and pay attention to the relation of the two people to eachother....it seems like the guy is a little past the girl but both faces are in a perfect profile.....making the faces at the correct angles will really emphasise that they are looking at eachother.
yeah right now i see an attempt to show movement, but the figures are still very static...folds in cloths and dimension with line will help that quite a bit though.
sorry....that got long. just trying to help
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extra line wont be added until the coloring phase since i am going to try computer coloring but otherwise thank you ver much for tha advice. Actually, she isn't looking ta him but he is looking at her, she is avoiding making eye contact but she is holding his hand, a feature i am cerain only i know because i drew it
I love your advice worry not about length
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