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Published: 2014-06-28 06:22:59 +0000 UTC; Views: 35826; Favourites: 243; Downloads: 88
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Overlord and Trepan.maybe slash?
Thanks for sweet Eabevella for English transtion <3<3<3
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Was Lode the person they were testing on in the end?
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I love this art fron trepan and overlord....it's so mindfucking gorgeous...
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Don't know who these guys are, but they're awesome and I now ship them XD
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Holy snapapple! I got chills at those last few panels!
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feel free to ignore this, I understand... but.....
Eabevella helped with the English translation, which is great, but may I give a suggestion? One part you have Trepan state: "You've make a success. And a good one."
I guess its the grammar part that I'm having a hold on. If left as it is, it should read "You've MADE a success. A good one."
"Made" implies that he just did it. In this context, "make" implies Overlord is getting ready to do something.
Most of our teachers tell us not to follow "and," "but," and "or" after a period. It does work SOMETIMES, but this is not one of those sentences that it can apply to.
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Your English readers will more then likely be confused at the way its worded.
Either:
"You've were successful."
~~ OR ~~
"You're making good progress."
The first suggestion takes out the second part because when you state something is "successful'' then "good" is implied, making the second part unnecessary.
The second suggestion acts the same way, but is also telling Overlord that there is always room for improvement.
Like I said, feel free to ignore it. This is merely a suggestion. Someone else might have a better phrasing that even those two stated options. From my point of view at least, these are still an option.
I'm not an expert in English by any means, and I make my own mistakes. That is a given. I am merely a fan of your work and am offering a helpful suggestion.
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Thank you very very very much, for your kind and truly suggestion .
You are so good and honest, thank you, I appreciate it.
I will correct this comic and repost it, and glad there are friends (good at English) willing to help me
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I'm glad to give any suggestions.
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Damnt. so twistet but so beautiful at the same time! >.<
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You paint such wonderful robot hands TAT I love them.
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oh...Lobeee...student or friend?
He is amazing...your style and ideas. You made them so perfect. So subtle in his cruelity
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Argh... I don't know whether to delighted to see this ship or be horrified of what they're doing... So confused...
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