HOME | DD
Kyleniebob — God's Shelf
Published: 2004-08-26 03:06:24 +0000 UTC; Views: 133; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 9
Redirect to original
Description
The people came, MomThe people you warned me about since I was little
They stole me away from you, Mom
One had black hair so brittle
The other one I couldn’t see
He held the gun to my back, Mom
I cried out and he threatened to kill me
So I went with them, Mom
I was frightened because you weren’t here
I was shivering, Mom
I know they could since my fear
They took me to the city, Mom
Where they forced me into a room
They let go of me, Mom
And then with my eyes I spotted a broom
I waited until they were looking the other way, Mom
Before I began my attack
I hit the brittle haired one, Mom
I heard a loud smack
Then I saw blood sprout from his face, Mom
And I knew he was dead
I aimed for the other one, Mom
But he shot me instead
I tried to survive, Mom
But the man shot me again
I watched him run away, Mom
The last sound I heard was him starting up the van
So please don’t cry, Mom
And don’t blame yourself
I’m safe now, Mom
Safe on God’s sturdy shelf
Related content
Comments: 20
wtf are you doing! omg you made me think agian....wait she killed and than got killed....so confusing! but its good though
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
wtf are you doing! omg you made me think agian....wait she killed and than got killed....so confusing!
👍: 0 ⏩: 1
sorry didnt mean to post twice i just got confused! haha
👍: 0 ⏩: 1
Good i love the whole thing with the mom. I did see this though
"I know they could since my fear" shouldnt since be sense
👍: 0 ⏩: 1
*bangs head* lol. Thankees!
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
disturbing, that's why it's so awesome. get people out of their comfort zone and they'll remember a peice like this.
👍: 0 ⏩: 1
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww so sad but really awesome!
👍: 0 ⏩: 1
I like the story to the poem but it doesn't flow very well. I think its the comma placement, it confoosed me O.o Also I think you should add some more to the ending. I had this one poem and my teacher said one way to ecplain something better would be to explain hands. Now don't lauoh just think about it and see what you some up with. Thanks for letting me read this ^_^
👍: 0 ⏩: 1
awww! And thanks for commenting! 
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
*luffs on8 I've always wanted to draw smething like that piccie and put:
Dear Sheriff,
hehe I got a gun.
xD
👍: 0 ⏩: 1