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LegendarySim — Getting Older
Published: 2012-05-21 03:19:07 +0000 UTC; Views: 211; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 8
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I'll be the first to admitthat the liquor has me
actin' a bit silly
But it's something
I do partake in
and it's a part of
getting older.
I can't remember
where my phone is...
and I'm sure its on
vibrate. Dammit!
I probably did
smoke a bit much,
but that's done
and over with.
I have the cough
for proof.
I don't know why
but my car has seemed
to misplace me in the
parking lot.
Bills are paid
for the month.
And I can finally relax,
getting older.
Wait...
aren't I missing something?
Comments: 10
Ah, the things we miss as we get older. I like this poem. It leaves me with a sense of one of those poems that laments the loss of youth, but isn't blatant about it...
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I just hate looking for my keys all the time. ROFLMAO.
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Don't we all? I'm always losing something.
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I'm particularly fond of losing my cell phone and keys. Everything else is usually fine.
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I am not sure about this, but isn't it: "am I missing something?", I just thought about it, don't know if this is correct or not.
I find this "I don't know why, but my car has seemed, to misplace me in the, parking lot." (sorry for the commas hehe)" very interesting, and I don't know if I get it wrong but when reading it I can't help thinking that.. you've ended up somewhere you weren't supposed to end, in life. Like you wanted to be somwhere else, or perhaps you're just a little confused. I don't know, just a thought haha. Good poem anyway
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It's simply about getting older. Standing in a parking lot wondering where you car is when you swore you parked it here when it was there. Lack of commas is more than intentional. Rather than a short pause I want readers to look at it as a dramatic pause.
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yeah okay, hahaha. Yes I know it is, but I had to add some commas when putting the text together like I did 
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