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Published: 2003-09-14 17:23:11 +0000 UTC; Views: 6171; Favourites: 28; Downloads: 1057
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He's staring at meThe man from the movie poster
And the lights are shining through my eyes
Mischief. Mayhem. Soap
It reads me like the caution label
On this bottle of Asprin
No matter where I go his eyes are there
And they are almost like yours
Filled with haunting sighs of relief
Mishchief. Mayhem. Soap
It speaks to me like the words
Of my kindergarden play
Even between closed eyes I vision that face
Mocking my cries to a pillow named "why"
Mischief. Mayhem. Soap
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Comments: 96
Great artwork....lovin the Fight Club message.
Kickin work
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Ammazing piece. Almost as good as Chuck's book. +FAV!
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Nothing about this stands out to me. It seems to lack all substance whatsoever.
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Fight club fans unite.... if only it would really happen though...
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very good use of repatition. if you thought of different ways of bringing up his eyes, draw similarities of them and metaphors. it'd make the poem more interesting rather than 'his eyes, his eyes, his eyes'
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this is just really interesting, I like the flow of it, I really dig exp poetry, and this is some of the better I have read on DA, nice work
-Trevor
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I love not only the poem but the artwork as well. While reading it I almost felt that chilling gaze you describe :]
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Your images are too concrete for this to be abstract. Your repetition is inhibiting to the flow and degretory to the writing.
Your imagery is overused and immaturely progressive.
Suffice to say your writing is underdeveloped.
If anything truthfully "spoke to you like the words in your kindergarten play" about this poem, they would be monosyllabic and slanderous.
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Take truth for what it's worth. If you don't want to improve, than simply ignore it and be happy in your padded world of ignorant comments.
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More time spent on this could improve it greatly (especially if you expanded on the theme of paranoia), but as it stands now, this feels bare.
There is potential here but.
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very nicely composed and it goes so well the fight club. that is a cool poster btw
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very sweet..... plus favorite
i like fight clug
this pic
the poem
great job
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AWEsome job.........seriously i love fight club you did great
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haha, very cool! If you like fight club, I did an oil portrait of Tyler durden, it's featured on my page, [link] . feel free to check it out if you feel like
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I love the repetition of "Mischief. Mayhem. Soap" it really works well. The flow to this is really nice to. Good work.
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oh man i feel dumb.. i was so busy looking at that gorgeous pic that i didnt realize that there was a fantastic poem to be read here.. this is excellent work; seems a different style than the other works in your gallery.. i like this a lot; it speaks like a nightmare. fantastic
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Great work and poem!!!
lol his eyes always watch me.
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The poem and the artwork work really well together, great work
-DR.
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great poem, creepy pic. fight club was great, specially 'where is my mind?' at the end
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that made the PERFECT ending 
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no problem
hey ya know somebody told me today the pixies are gettin back together! woo
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that's poem is fucking hot. love the repetition.
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wow.. this is teh uber-yum.. well done, well done!
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I like this one..
for one, I've seen "Fight Club" and it's one of my fav. movies..
second, I know what's it about so I can relate to poem..
word choice is wise and the picture fits it well..
strong imagery.. keep up the good work..
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Now I wanna see Fight Club!!!...(Never saw the movie...)...
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Nice work on the poster and the poem goes quite nicely.
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Tres cool. It almost looks like a Nazi propaganda poster! lol I love the use of color in it and the quote. A little dark on the top half, but maybe you wanted it that way. Looks great.
*ps* I rather dislike the way some people see something that's good on DA, and automatically assume a guy did it. It's so neanderthal.
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i always get freaked out at night by my postors....great poem.
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this is awesome. Fight Club is probably my favorite movie behind Pulp Fiction. great work here bro
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Thanks so much! Very much apprecitaed! One thing, I'm a girl
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I love fight club! I used to hate having posters up on my wall. I didn't like the eyes always following me. love the poem
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...FIGHT CLUB! This is great, describes him greatly.
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gotta give upto the fight club fan art. good stuff!
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heh... i like this line "Mocking my cries to a pillow named "why"" ... a decent little ditty
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