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Llunet1 — Moonlight - Chapter 1
Published: 2014-07-17 06:38:33 +0000 UTC; Views: 191; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 1
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Yay! After two years I have finally rewritten this chapter LOL. Going to work on the rest soon.
I actually tried rewriting this last year, but I never finished. Now after browsing through my gallery and reading the old one... oh god I cringed so much as I was reading. Some parts were just so STATIC. I'm sure some parts in this are still a little ehh... but it's SO much better than before. So I'm proud XD I also finished this really fast o-o
Anyway, the old ones are still in my gallery - they haven't been deleted just yet... So if you really want to cry at the awful writing... you can go find it in the Moonlight>OLD folder XD
If you've read the old chapter you will notice some changes and some parts that were never there before. I added them to really SHOW... because Yumi always talks about how she's a "freak" (which was changed in the first revision... but oh well that's not getting posted XD) and how faeries don't like her... but you never actually get to see a faerie! Which is weird, because when I was writing Moonlight I always imagine this one scene very similar to the new one where she kind of talks to a faerie. So... I hope it's better.
Plus, you get to see Koizumi some more XD //that ending
I loved doing that... XD I just imagine it occurring after some credits... you know? XD Anyway. I hope you enjoy this, hopefully way more than the old version, and look out for updates!
Moonlight (Story) is owned by Llunet1 and all characters in it.
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It is much better. I applaud you. I enjoyed it. I still can't figure out what she is... But there's more plot to it now XD
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Hahahah. Heeeeeee.
And hopefully more... environment XD
IT'S IN OHIO NOW LOL. Not some random place.
Even though. Trees. I wish there were more trees in Ohio. *adds some*
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Hahait depends on what part of Ohio your in. Tere are plenty of trees in north east/central Ohio.
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//looked from a satellite view of the area Yumi lives... everything looks brown and dead LOL.
It's north... I think north central.
Elyria, OH
(I put it in the first chapter. So proud of myself for actually picking a state XD)
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Well it might be winter... Or July when that photo was taken...
Haha XD yup!
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Perhaps. Didn't think of that actually... HMMMM.
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Hmmm weather is a butt out here just gotta say
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